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June 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
;lkgsj;sdfg;dshg;fdjg!!!
it\'s the most constructive thought my brain can proceed right now.
that and:
i. want. more.
holy damn, that was hot! =*-*=
~aion
it\'s the most constructive thought my brain can proceed right now.
that and:
i. want. more.
holy damn, that was hot! =*-*=
~aion
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June 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I loved the concepts, and you write very very very well!! I can\'t wait to see more of this fic.
The writing was good, descriptions and all, but I think it\'d be better if you slipped a few more little details in there. But don\'t make the mistake of making them seem out of place. Also, I think you could be more in character. Look into Farf and Ken a bit..
T_T Grreat fic though.
The writing was good, descriptions and all, but I think it\'d be better if you slipped a few more little details in there. But don\'t make the mistake of making them seem out of place. Also, I think you could be more in character. Look into Farf and Ken a bit..
T_T Grreat fic though.