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for Loving you

by BlindHeart34

person Lola
schedule November 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
In all seriousness, do you speak English? ...At all? You may want to figure out how to type a period. And quotation marks. I also suggest you invest in an English course, starting at perhaps a fourth grade level, but only after you have mastered the concept of ending a sentence with a period and clarifying speakers through use of quotation marks.

Do these things and then maybe figure out how the characters really act. Then also look up the definition of the word \"plot\". Combine ingredients. Stir. Cook for 3 to 4 years and then begin writing again.
person Jene
schedule November 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I see potential. Just really really bad grammer I mean just learn how to format maybe.Hey if you email the attchment I can work out all the kinks for you. You know like double spacing and, sentance sturcture.Just give me an email and I\'ll help you out seriously.
person Jamin
schedule July 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
No offence, but who ever wrote this stroy, you really need to learn how to right. I mean come on, every time they talked it took me a whole mintue to firgure out that they had spoken.

Other then that I liked the story, just learn how to write.

(p.s. the reason I did not leave my e-mail address was so that I don\'t critismed from what I wrote)

(p.s.s. Learn how to write didn\'t)

(p.s.s.s. I openly speak my mind)

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