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July 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You are unbelievable! You had me sobbing my eyes out! You are just too much setting us down right in the middle of things that seem to grab us he the throat and choke us to death....! Okay.. is that enough drama? But really... this is a very hard hitting piece that you\'ve captured well on emotions...again. Can\'t wait to read more when you do update, yet dreading it at the same time. Harsher/dark mode? Oh, God! *Burying me head* Well, bring it on... Have to take your chapters with a grain of salt and true grit, but somehow I don\'t think we\'ll be disappointed in your overall work... Hope to see something soon.
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July 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
\"sniffle, sniffle* Thought your other story Portrait was difficult enough that you broke them up, but now... *bawling* You like making people suffer, don\'t you? If I can sit here and feel shocshock, I can just figure what Dee\'s going through! Great job for a beginning story. I\'ll be here waiting with tissues on hand!
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July 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I like to see how you\'re going to get yourself out of this one! Portrait Without Sin was really unique and you had a way of wrenching out every tear drop there was, and you\'re giving us something that gonna cause more heartbreak?! And you\'re going to hit harder? I\'m going to have to go out and buy a new pillow, and box of tissues!! You\'ve got a great start of a story though, and I\'m in anticipation of just what you will come up for this one. I\'ll be checking in.... *thumb up for good luck*
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July 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hello -
I think this 1st chapter is a good starter. I hope you decide to continue with it. The tightness of the writing and the emotions of Dee come through quite well.
That there is more author\'s note and warnings to it than fiction worries me, though. Some people may only want to read pwp (porn with out plot) or lightly angsty situations. However, if with 1 warning (that shows on the top level of the FAKE list before the reader ever clicks on the story to read) that this particular piece of fiction is dark, folks decide to read and then get upset, it\'s their problem. Not yours.
Again, I hope you decide to continue with this piece of fiction. It\'s off to a good start.
I think this 1st chapter is a good starter. I hope you decide to continue with it. The tightness of the writing and the emotions of Dee come through quite well.
That there is more author\'s note and warnings to it than fiction worries me, though. Some people may only want to read pwp (porn with out plot) or lightly angsty situations. However, if with 1 warning (that shows on the top level of the FAKE list before the reader ever clicks on the story to read) that this particular piece of fiction is dark, folks decide to read and then get upset, it\'s their problem. Not yours.
Again, I hope you decide to continue with this piece of fiction. It\'s off to a good start.