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January 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Whoa... just, whoa. A very long and interesting chapter.
Well, that was unexpected... and amazing. The violence of this chapter is stunning. (Be warned, a long review is coming...) Zesiro and Raoul: Fantastic... I love it! The whole fight (especially with a Blondie being able to unleash his full strength and still getting beaten) was amazing. I also think that poor Raoul has some major explaining to do to Iason and/or Jupiter. I would like to see Raoul on top once though... I guess I'm requesting a night where they switch once (or twice or thrice...). Raoul just might surprise Zesiro in that regard. I mean, come on... he's a Blondie. And Raoul and Zesiro seem to be squirming their way into being major characters in this story... without bumping Mingan and Sevilen to the back burner...
So now we go to Mingan and Sevilen. I *love* that whole hunter/predator image, and you write so descriptively!! At the same time (even though I knew Sevilen was going to get hurt) it was interesting to see that Mingan couldn't overcome his instincts. Poor Sevilen... I hope he isn't too traumatized. He had an extremely rough experience... on top of everything else that happened to him, and all because he wanted to save Mingan's life. (Nice image of decapitating the delegate barehanded though... and bloody.)
Except now I'm just eaten alive with curiosity... what did Sevilen see from Jupiter? How is Mingan going to soothe Sevilen's shattered psyche? What is the connection between Zesiro and Sevilen? (My guess is that Sevilen's father has something to do with it...).
The whole chapter (and thank you so very much for such a very long and satisfying chapter) had such a sharp clear edge to it... I could visualize everything. (I love Zesiro's tail, by the way.) The violence was *very* violent, and the descriptions were *very* descriptive... I am your fan for life. But as much as I loved it, I think maybe poor Sevilen needs a break... hopefully there won't be very much violence in the next chapter so that he can catch his breath (and maybe Mingan can work on patching up the trust he shattered).
As always, I am eagerly awaiting the next installment. You are a marvel to me (especially since I can't write!)
~Cory
Well, that was unexpected... and amazing. The violence of this chapter is stunning. (Be warned, a long review is coming...) Zesiro and Raoul: Fantastic... I love it! The whole fight (especially with a Blondie being able to unleash his full strength and still getting beaten) was amazing. I also think that poor Raoul has some major explaining to do to Iason and/or Jupiter. I would like to see Raoul on top once though... I guess I'm requesting a night where they switch once (or twice or thrice...). Raoul just might surprise Zesiro in that regard. I mean, come on... he's a Blondie. And Raoul and Zesiro seem to be squirming their way into being major characters in this story... without bumping Mingan and Sevilen to the back burner...
So now we go to Mingan and Sevilen. I *love* that whole hunter/predator image, and you write so descriptively!! At the same time (even though I knew Sevilen was going to get hurt) it was interesting to see that Mingan couldn't overcome his instincts. Poor Sevilen... I hope he isn't too traumatized. He had an extremely rough experience... on top of everything else that happened to him, and all because he wanted to save Mingan's life. (Nice image of decapitating the delegate barehanded though... and bloody.)
Except now I'm just eaten alive with curiosity... what did Sevilen see from Jupiter? How is Mingan going to soothe Sevilen's shattered psyche? What is the connection between Zesiro and Sevilen? (My guess is that Sevilen's father has something to do with it...).
The whole chapter (and thank you so very much for such a very long and satisfying chapter) had such a sharp clear edge to it... I could visualize everything. (I love Zesiro's tail, by the way.) The violence was *very* violent, and the descriptions were *very* descriptive... I am your fan for life. But as much as I loved it, I think maybe poor Sevilen needs a break... hopefully there won't be very much violence in the next chapter so that he can catch his breath (and maybe Mingan can work on patching up the trust he shattered).
As always, I am eagerly awaiting the next installment. You are a marvel to me (especially since I can't write!)
~Cory
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January 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
please don't stop there more need more
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January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow!! another great chapter!! ...with much violence! damn! can't wait for the next chapter!! what did he see????
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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hehehe just found out how too write reviews lol well once again AWSOME you already know i love your style of writing that leaves me wanting more. i cant wait for the next chapter. Too be honest with you i dont like to read your stories when there not completly finished cause I GET ADDICTED OR SOMETHING. so please PLEASE!!! get the next chapter out soon i know im not going to be able to stop wondering what happens next until i finish the story
Demon your #1 fan lol (maybe not but I LOVE YOUR WRITINGS)
Demon your #1 fan lol (maybe not but I LOVE YOUR WRITINGS)
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January 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
"Hi. My name is Cory, and I am an addict." XD Wow... well, even if I didn't like Ai no Kusabi, I am in love with this story. I think I'm addicted to most of your stories... Ch. 4 is great! And I am really eager now to see the next meeting between Raoul and Zesiro... I'm betting the sparks will be flying! Because Zesiro isn't going to be some little plaything for Raoul to order around..... mmm.
I can't wait for Ch. 5... something inside me is whispering that the tide will change... I haven't forgotten the delegates yet and neither has Mingan, I bet. Something *bad* is going to happen.... XD or not... that's just my intuition. Keep up the wonderful work... I might even prefer an update to this one rather than Saiyuki right now... and that's saying something.
~Cory
I can't wait for Ch. 5... something inside me is whispering that the tide will change... I haven't forgotten the delegates yet and neither has Mingan, I bet. Something *bad* is going to happen.... XD or not... that's just my intuition. Keep up the wonderful work... I might even prefer an update to this one rather than Saiyuki right now... and that's saying something.
~Cory
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January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg! i love this fic! and wow! loved the toy! and i can't wait till raoul meets his match!! great chapter!
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January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*purrrrr* thank you for the new chapter!
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*purrrrr* Oh my, I can't believe it... two new chapters for me to enjoy. You are an amazing and gifted writer. I can perfectly imagine what's happening from your descriptions, and you are also adding an engaging plot. Please, keep up the fantastic work. I know I said I didn't like Ai no Kusabi... but you might make me change my mind. ^__^
I like the original characters you created. You give them very real motivations and reactions. I am very interested in seeing exactly what Raoul "caught" the interest of in his directed dreaming, and I also am waiting to see if the delegates are just going to give up after failing their mission or if another death threat is looming for Mingan. (Of course, we all know he could handle it... but it will be interesting finding out.)
Thank you for sharing such a marvelous story.
~Cory
I like the original characters you created. You give them very real motivations and reactions. I am very interested in seeing exactly what Raoul "caught" the interest of in his directed dreaming, and I also am waiting to see if the delegates are just going to give up after failing their mission or if another death threat is looming for Mingan. (Of course, we all know he could handle it... but it will be interesting finding out.)
Thank you for sharing such a marvelous story.
~Cory
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December 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a fantastic spin on Ai no Kusabi. I hope you will update soon! UPDATE!!!
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December 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
How do you do it?
Seriously, I don't even like Ai no Kusabi and I still read and enjoyed this fic. Surprisingly, I'm interested enough to read the next chapter when it comes along. I'm glad I clicked on that link, even though I wasn't sure I wanted to read it or not. Thank you. You have a very cool plot going here.
~Cory
Seriously, I don't even like Ai no Kusabi and I still read and enjoyed this fic. Surprisingly, I'm interested enough to read the next chapter when it comes along. I'm glad I clicked on that link, even though I wasn't sure I wanted to read it or not. Thank you. You have a very cool plot going here.
~Cory