rate_review Reviews

I tried to read this story a while back but I couldn't. . . I had a hard time trying to get passed how you had written Belial. Because in the Manga she had taken a drug when she figured out that she was becoming female. She didn't want to be female. So I got a bit upset and couldn't get through the first chapter.

But trying to put that fact aside I read your story. And its not too bad.

Also if you need a Beta, feel free email me.

I miss this story so much...Are you ever going to update again?

I don't really know what to say about this fic. On the one hand, I like its originality and earnestness. I've never really seen a fic that deals with this subject before. But on the other hand, as someone who is intersexed, I'm not sure how to feel about it. Words like 'tranny' and 'hermy' really piss me off, but then those aren't exactly 'your' words, so. I would say, though, that Belial's annoyance at being asked his/her sexual preference as if that somehow defines anything, is completely familliar.

As for grammar, no worries on that front that I saw. There were a few typos here and there, but that could be due to the way that the uploading process sometimes cannibalises things. I'm not sure. You might want to give it a once-over, but there's nothing too jarring.