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wow the chapters are getting real good and i can not wait for the next chapter of the story and see what happen next with raven and katz ..will raven listen to rauol and not have sex with kazt. i have to wait an see and i hope that you have very good new year. and i will be wait for the next chapter.

merry christmas to you and a happy new year see you next year with a new chapter of the story.

Thank you for answering my question about Raven's age and this was another interesting update. I can't believe Katze would do that he's going to make life hard for himself and Raven, it just seemed so out of character for him. I'm glad you have a plot worked out it's just too bad we'll have to wait for a new chapter, but I hope you have a great holiday and will look forward to your update.

kiba21. i hope thatyou have a nice christmas and a happy new year. and i be here wait for more of the story and see what happens to raven and roual and katza. and to see if raven leans about his father and isaon. but i want to say that to . so have a good christmas and new year and see you in jan for more of the story. and the chapter was real good and raven getting drank with the ryn was nice and he going to roual and figth with him. good luck. merry christmas and happy new year.

I have been meaning to review for quite a while now but you've been so good about updating that everytime I come to check on the story I spend all of my time reading the new chapter and then going back and rereading parts that I liked.
I've been pulled into the story even though I usually don't like original characters but Raven has definitely caught my interest, of course he reminds me of Riki but you've also done a good job of giving him his own personality.
Also I love Katze he is my favourite character but he really is having a bad time of things, he always seems to be doing what everyone else wants. Chapter 6 was a good example of that, even after what had happened between the two he knew that Raoul would want Raven back so regardless of what he was feeling he sent him back. It was the same with chapter 11 the ending was just heartbreaking, everyone seems to get someone except Katze who is alone-it's so sad.
Chapter 12 was really hard to read but it did a good job of showing that no matter what this is not an equal partnership and can't be as long as Raven is treated as a pet by Raoul. This along with everything else that's going on has definitely got me hooked and as long as you don't abandon the story at any point then I will definitely be waiting to read more.
There was just one question I had and that was how old is Raven, I know you said he was about the same age as Riki so that was what 17-18 I'm too lazy to figure it out myself so a little note to answer this would be appreciated!

okay that clear some of the things i was think about when i read the story. but i still think that you are doing a real good job and i love the story so far and ihope things work out for raven. will he every lean about his father and isaon. i am sorry if i ask so many quistons. it just when i read and i like to think about think like that. but it tell me that the writer is doing a real good job on their storys and keep the readed to read more of the story. i can not wait for the next chapter and see what happen next .. good luck your faithful reader.

wow tht was a good chapter and can not wait for the next chapter and see what raven and raoul going to do . raoul is acting like isaon and he does not know that . poor raven have to not think about kataz . that is his first love. do rave know that riki was his father and that raoul know that raven is riki son. but the story is real good. good luck on the next chapter and will be wait for more.

very good chapter , and guy think that raven is riki or is raven riki son. but you know for it your story. but i love the story and can not wait for more . good luck.

I liked chapter ten very much. It's sweet like Raoul let Raven escape. ;-) Hey, don't worry about the language, just continue. Once you get a beta, everything can be explained, solved and settled.

Your story is still picking up steam and rolling well. I love the character development. Raven is just so complex that it's beautiful. You have fleshed him out, and his evolution is well paced. You provide enough hints of his past without giving everything away. Was happy to see Raoul letting him get away. If you need a beta, I'm happy to volunteer. However, be aware that English is not my native language. I would not worry too much about the English. Hey as long as your readers can understand what your trying to convey is all that counts!

Looking forward to the next part of Raven's story.

--Anon