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for The Heat of the Moment

by KIKI441

person keke
schedule June 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 34:
aw fuck! dude, Yuu is hanging with the wrong crowd... and Yuuri is going to be totally heart broken, and he'll probably go Maoh mode and be pissed, kicking ass... I just hope he doesnt harm Yuu :'(
person keke
schedule June 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I was freaking tearing up over chapter 36!!! no way is this fair

damn damn damn!!! damn it all! I... love this story so much- it's amazing *sobbing*
person keke
schedule June 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 38:

o___________o *speechless except the words-* oh fuck.

RIP Yuu Gibit Shibuya
person keke
schedule June 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
well I just happily read you entire story Princess Sin, and Im leaving you my final review, giving you my thanks and informing you on how much fun and heartache and smiling and laughing I experienced throughout this story, I literally got on a emotional rollercoaster for this one, Im proud to have stayed in my seat, sigh, and I reviewed so much- if any of my reviews are meaningless, then I hope you are thrilled with this one... I wish this wasnt my last review... but it is*choked sob*... thank you so much for not discontinuing and for giving all your readers a legendary fanfiction; I promise you, you are skilled- you brought out honest emnotions, I cried for Wolfram, Yuu, Yuuri, Gisela... I smiled for Gwendal, Gunter, Wolfram, Yuuri.. and I laughed with them, I took a journey with them- I will NEVER forget your story, while I was reading- I was always looking forward to the future of the stories, I predicted what might happen, and I loved how you were so original and gave me a suprise...

I admit in the beginning, Wolfram running away made me think I would be reading something that wasnt really anything special, perhaps you know how many stories there are out there in which Wolfie runs away because of Yuuri unrequited love- or more like his attraction, or his stupid beliefs etc, and when you introduced the OC characters I feared that my interest would wane because I honestly cared about only Yuuri and Wolfie and their business...

But you should know that your OC characters were well thought out, which proves my point that you yourself is really good at characterization, as the OCs( I almost hate to call them that, they felt as real as the original KKM characters) had strong personalities and I grew to love and adore people such as Gilbit, Eric, Yuu(oh he was so confused, and he made my heart ache)... really, Im reflecting all the emotions I felt, there are so many, my throat still has a foot in it, Im sad for the end, but so happy about the fairytale ending that was preceded by such a wonderful, well thought out journey. I want to compliment your creativity if I havent already O:)

sigh, I still have a lot to say... ? I cant form all the words I wish to say to you, my emotions are still running amok! *big sigh* I will just say this, hehe, you had many nice ways of ending your chappies and building suspense, I would LOVE a sequel(just think about it please), and when Reginald smiled at Yuuri, it was so cool when Murata took the baby in his arms and the baby was revealed as the reincarnate of Shinou!!! how wonderful <3

I close here, brilliant story Princess Sin, you are an author that would be great inspiration for when I write my own fanfictions. *sincere bow full of inspiration and praise*
person keke
schedule May 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE reviewing awesome Kyo Kara Moah stories~
This one is topping the list too... I want to describe to you all the things that you do right with this story including: foreshadowing, characterization, describing emotions/appearance.. and most of all you make me feel the frustration- the anger, the hurt that Wolfie feels.. I am loving your story, which is original and will grow in my heart as one of my favorite fanfictions period.
person keke
schedule May 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4:

it's funny how they think Wolfie is Shinou- besides the blonde hair, the Great Shinou has blue eyes and wolfie has emerald irises xD
person keke
schedule May 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 11:

haha!! I knew it, that Wolfie would faint after he saw Yuuri! xDD

I love your story, OCs are hard to get used to, but with you they fall into place, they seem to have a point instead of being useless and annoying... hehe you know how some people like to center their stories around OCs(I dislike that) >.<

again, I love your OCs and story ;)
person keke
schedule May 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
omigosh... I totally get the sense of how much Wolfie and Yuu are hurting... man.. I honestly feel bad for Yuuri. :(

hrm... you have a beautiful story, and man there is so much angst, I'll be on cloud nine when Wolfram and Yuu finally forgive Yuuri- sigh and I know that will take awhile T_T
person maximus
schedule April 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I have to say you did a thorough job completing this novel. And I was hooked. I've been reading for 2 days straight until I am finally finished with it. It was all but good! Five star If I might add. On the contrary, as their will always be things to improve, I've recognized that most of the characters, especially the young ones (6 and 9 years old if i remember) seems not to speak their own age. To make it simple, I think everyone is of the the same rational thinking and worst its most obvious that it comes from the same person (Author =(). I don't find it convincing. More characterization please =)). Second, I'm quite impressed with the words the characters are telling. But to me, their feelings of strong emotions are becoming redundant and its as if in every chapter its always the same element and always [with climax????]. (Like a funny joke. At first hearing you might laugh with all your heart but if you hear it again the second time, you may not be as amused as before. And the third time? and fourth? and fifth? Well I think you can get my point on that.) I observed most outmodedNESS (I know its not a word. I made it up. just emphasizing XD) can be seen with Wolfram and Yuu's. I was heart broken at first but as they always say their dilemma again and again to other characters, to be honest I found myself skipping as I already knew what they are about to say (annoyed). Third, phasing of the story is very fast, that sometimes I lost in track. Fourth, I am most honestly confused at first with Eric (king) and Derrick (inventor) as I thought they are the same person. Try to make names of different syllabication and pattern, not the ones that mesh. And fifth. I know this is but a work of fiction. And the world of kyo Kara Maoh is, but stay at the boundaries of fiction for adult please. Trully impossible fictions are for kids (e.g. The images of Yuu transporting like holograms to help the protagonists, the spirit of Ellis coming back to life to save protagonists. And Yuu becoming so powerful ad saving the day I thought is lame) O please...

Hmm that's all. I loved it Anyway, don't take this criticisms to heart =). It really was a very nice story. I won't continue reading it if it's not XD Lastly, its good how you created a really good plot and setting. As far As I'm concerned, most stories here in adultfanfiction are not really stories but situations of pure lemon/ecchi yada yada. It's good to have something to read with a real story. =))))) Continue to make good stories for us

My rate - 9.8/10
person ladymatsuura
schedule July 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Best kkm fanfic ever! It saddens me to read its end but I do hope there's a sequel planned somewhere in that mind of yours Sin. I shall await!^^

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