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for Echoes in Time

by amandatrue

schedule July 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Review was transferred from old eFics website.

tamingriki said:
Now that Kai is out of the fog the really difficult process begins-the healing.  But with Raimen and Riki by his side he will persevere.
Can't wait for Omaki's shabang.  I've been imagining all sorts of action that will be going on.  Whips, chains, chips, dip....gawk!!!!!   I just went to a VERY dark place in my mind!!!  "bwahahahahahahha!!!!!"
Better stop before I give myself a heart attack. :-)
Ciao!!


Author's Response: Thanx for the great review! I'm glad your imagination didn't go too dark...heh heh...but yeah, that is going to be an "interesting" party.
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11/05/08 - 02:12 pm
On: Chapter 1 Old Friends
schedule July 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Review was transferred from old eFics website.

Ryn said:
I had to laugh when Riki called his father a "man whore" and his little rant about his and Iason's father's. That was hilarious. I also can't wait for what happens at Omaki's party. That will be both interersting and hilarious.  When I read the part with Raimon was yelling at Kai throught the fog and said "...I’m not going to lose you once again you old geezer, so you better stay put or I’ll have to put you over my knee..." I had to snicker at that and thought 'hadn't Iason actually done something similar to Riki on several occassions'.  And Kai's reasoning the ghosts don't make threats turned my snickers in to a full blown laugh.
I love this story and can not wait for more (especially Omaki's party). Please continue!!
Ryn 

Author's Response: Thanx for the funny review!  I warned you that when the squirrels want to go out and play, one must do just that *laughs* I'm glad you are enjoying the story...
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12/05/08 - 03:01 am
On: Chapter 1 Old Friends
schedule April 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
First let me thank you for the update and apologize for the tardy review. Also thanks for the long but exceptionally well written chapter. In thanks I give to you the following: 1-box king sized snickers ice cream bars, 1-box baby ruth's, a dozen grams of white chocolate chip cookies, sugar cookies, and peanut butter cookies, and a life time supply of Butter Pecan Custard (courtesy of the best custard shop in all of WI, Kopps[also available online and worth ever penny]).

Okay now a review.

Lord Bastard is a fitting name for the 'Bastard' Bastian. I honestly think Raimen will get frisky with anything pretty with a place to put 'it'. The difference in the parenting from Kai and Raimen is defined very well in this chapter by Kai staying close to his son when in their 'minds eye' and Raimen being more concerned with getting into Jake's pants. Riki's manipulation of his father is encouraging. Yes their fathers can get aroused in 'any' situation. The brief moment of a serious Omaki was rather scary. Omaki's logs were a little heart rending but I loved the glimpse into the past and hope to read more in the (hopefully near) future.

Ganbatte!!

Ryn
person cricri
schedule April 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yay! He’s one of the ancients after all!! I can’t wait to see what’ll Yousi do in the space ship, must be something fun
person barrie18
schedule April 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Forgive me if I'm overstepping boundaries, but when I read a story I get involved with, I perhaps get carried away in a one sided discussion and question the characters motives, not trying to influence the authors directions. ..

So to begin. . .
There is love and LOVE. . . .Riki and Iason LOVE. They only have eyes for each other and if they were to have relationships with others (forgetting the mind's eye incident with Omaki) on a regular basis, it would just feel 'wrong' for a better word.

Then there is love. . .where most people past and present in Amoi seem to have fleeting feelings for the moment and bed hop happily with no quarms. Lord Kai and Raimen LOVE each other, but accept their natures to explore and that seems to work for them. They both LOVE their wives and interstingly enough don't take other women feeling that would be unfaithful to them and the wives accept this happily.

So what's my problem. . . Raoul and Yui. . . Yui is not of the past, he only has one memory/life so to speak and he is told he has to learn to 'share' Raoul's love with the 'past'
love from a previous life.

Now he is willing to do this, but Lord Kai for all his humour and light heartedness appears to be the most damaged of all the old timers. In the past it appears that at the end he only had Raoul and that Raoul never left his side until he himself died in Kai's arms.

So when Raoul gets his memories back that is going to be a pretty big reconcile to deal with in the present. And even though he LOVES Ju now, once those memories come into play, I don't think Kai is going to want to 'share' Raoul because of what went on when all he had left was Raoul. And I think Raoul's past feelings will get in the way of the present because of how damaged Kai is even now.

Yui won't have a leg to stand on here, because Kai is so 'powerful' in his personality and in his comments to Raoul is already playing on their past ties. . . I like Yui, and I hope he won't get lost in all of this or that he leaves Raoul, because he feels that would be the best thing he could do.

So yes, I am totally enjoying this story and lookforward to seeing an update soon. . .
schedule April 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yousi is such a sweetheart,*smiles* Me liked very much can't wait to see what happens next.
person cricri
schedule April 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow....thank you...yousi at last
schedule April 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh my Gods!!! Where to begin? Ok Argent and Omi are cute together ans Omi's wickedness is enduring.(millennia aparently). Are the maidens hidden in the Path of the Ancients? Will Yousi be able to recover his memories of the past(all of it) with Iason and Riki's combined help?

Then there is Raimen and Kai... and then Raoul and Yui... To be in someone else's rooms and do THAT and then not stop once you've been found by the owners of said rooms, continue and have them join in... I am at a loss for words as to how absolutely brilliant that was.

Meanwhile...

Iason and Riki were shorting out circuitry and causing to lights to explode in their 'enjoyment' of each other. And Omaki's plan to record them in action backfiring was hilarious. It was cute how he and Argent tried to escape the fire sprinklers only to end up drenched. I can actually imagine Raoul's eyes twitching in annoyance. I was laughing for about ten minutes after I read what Riki said into Omaki and Argent's minds.

I'm glad to see Yui coming to terms with himself concerning Raoul. I think Raoul truly loves and adores Yui and I doubt that will change, ever. I'm also glad to see Kai slowly warming (though still no where near thawed) to Elder Petros.

I can't wait to find out what Riki and Iason find when they see Martin and Jake and I hope they rescue them in time.

schedule March 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Loved the chappie, but why the cliffie!?!?*pouts* Will at least I know that Martin and Jake ARE indeed going to be saved most likely in the next chap. so I will forgive you this time.*gives pointed look* Can't wait to see the next chapter, until then BYE!!*smiles*
schedule March 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi!!! I'm just starting but your writing is great as ever!!!

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