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July 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hello there...well, what can i say about this chapter except it was espected? Right now i'm just thinking: "OMG, poor riki, what a suffering"...but he deserve it!!! Now cry and beg for Iason to pity on him... T-T Poor Iason, he is so sad (even if he doesn't know it...XD ). And jupiter...crazy machine...well not crazy, more like...i don't know arrogant, haughty...
I've never like her, but well, even i have to thank her for creating such gorgeous creatures like Iason and Raoul (my cute one). And talking about him...he is añlready thinking of realising Guy for his safety...BUT I'LL PREFER DIE THAN LETTING THEM APART US!!! Jajajaja
Keep on going, this is REALLY GOOD!!!
I've never like her, but well, even i have to thank her for creating such gorgeous creatures like Iason and Raoul (my cute one). And talking about him...he is añlready thinking of realising Guy for his safety...BUT I'LL PREFER DIE THAN LETTING THEM APART US!!! Jajajaja
Keep on going, this is REALLY GOOD!!!
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July 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Glad I'm not driving you too crazy with my reviews :)
But to continue. . . in a very simple sentence I think many would have skimmed over. . . .files are being copied to a different location. So it seems that Jupiter is about to have a hand in the story and I can't see her being impressed that Riki has perfect DNA. Personally I think it would put him on her hit list ::evil laugh::
Now as to Mimea, well Riki might think she has a bird brain, but after this chapter we can see where Riki kept his brains. . . because she certainly got what she wanted out of him. . . .And the point is Riki at this stage still thinks of Iason as his Master, and perhaps a sex partner, but is not in love with him. Sex does not mean you are in love. . . I would like to think that Riki was easily seduced by Mimea because she is a rarity. . .a female, and in this case he is the seme. . .
On the other hand when Iason finds out, his jealousy is going to be out of bounds. . . . and perhaps this will play into Jupiters scheme, because I can't believe she is sitting there watching her favorite son having a mongrel pet and not grinding down her gears.
Guy seems to be very convoluted. As I've said, he is attracted to Raoul, but in love with Riki. And if Riki called him to his side, he would run to him.
So you've got all the players in place at the moment, it all depends on where you take them now. I can't see the year of freedom as in the book occurring, but I can see Iason losing the plot over Riki's actions and going after him. Guy finding out and taking action to protect his ex pairing partner, and all roads lead to Dana Bahn. . .. ::evil grin::
next chapter soon?
Here's hoping
But to continue. . . in a very simple sentence I think many would have skimmed over. . . .files are being copied to a different location. So it seems that Jupiter is about to have a hand in the story and I can't see her being impressed that Riki has perfect DNA. Personally I think it would put him on her hit list ::evil laugh::
Now as to Mimea, well Riki might think she has a bird brain, but after this chapter we can see where Riki kept his brains. . . because she certainly got what she wanted out of him. . . .And the point is Riki at this stage still thinks of Iason as his Master, and perhaps a sex partner, but is not in love with him. Sex does not mean you are in love. . . I would like to think that Riki was easily seduced by Mimea because she is a rarity. . .a female, and in this case he is the seme. . .
On the other hand when Iason finds out, his jealousy is going to be out of bounds. . . . and perhaps this will play into Jupiters scheme, because I can't believe she is sitting there watching her favorite son having a mongrel pet and not grinding down her gears.
Guy seems to be very convoluted. As I've said, he is attracted to Raoul, but in love with Riki. And if Riki called him to his side, he would run to him.
So you've got all the players in place at the moment, it all depends on where you take them now. I can't see the year of freedom as in the book occurring, but I can see Iason losing the plot over Riki's actions and going after him. Guy finding out and taking action to protect his ex pairing partner, and all roads lead to Dana Bahn. . .. ::evil grin::
next chapter soon?
Here's hoping
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July 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Riki it's just and idiot!!! How he DARE to cheat on Iason...i know maybe he doesn't feel complete as a man in his sexual relationship with Iason but, if everything it's getting better why not ask him on leting take him? Bu NOOOOO he has to go and sleep with that HORE!!! OMG i hate her!!! What an bitch!!!! (sorry the bad languaje, i'm just so angry with both of them)...T_T Poor Iason...well, more like poor Riki when Iason finds out... I think i'm gona enjoy that...maybe a litle. At the end i'm sure i'm gona cry and all that stuff, but when Iason finds out, i'm gona be SOOOO happy...
Althroug...the thing that happen in Raoul lab, that aparently "someone" (Jupiter, i bet my GUTS) copy the information he obtain for Riki, and just the same day that "woman" aproches him to say "you are beautifull"...? Very suspicious...
Guy..well, he is still in love with Riki but...sure Raoul will conquer him totally at the end...he is just to good for been real...
See you on the next chapter, this is great!!!
Althroug...the thing that happen in Raoul lab, that aparently "someone" (Jupiter, i bet my GUTS) copy the information he obtain for Riki, and just the same day that "woman" aproches him to say "you are beautifull"...? Very suspicious...
Guy..well, he is still in love with Riki but...sure Raoul will conquer him totally at the end...he is just to good for been real...
See you on the next chapter, this is great!!!
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July 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow, Awesome story!!
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July 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Interesting chapter, but now what? Wanton sex does not a relationship make :)
Raoul is as always the voice of reason here but even his explanation of Iason to Riki doesn't change the fact that Riki doesn't have 'feelings' as such for Iason. He might have the 'hots' for Iason, and after watching Raoul and Guy, it is no wonder he just about jumps him at the door, but that still doesn't change the basis of his feelings towards him.
As to Iason, that convoluted mess of emotions, would he even take into account anything Raoul would say to him? Or would it anger him that Riki even spoke to Raoul in this manner?
He might be annoyed at Raoul for revealing their past, but Raoul is his equal, Riki is his pet and talking to another Blondie about his master. . . well, as I've said before, the man might be able to conduct meetings but when it comes to his pet, he is an emotional mind field.
So how do you get them on the same page? Does Iason break Riki into loving him or does the Pet break the Master into changing his ways, and therefore making the master more appealing to the pet?
At this stage, Riki appears to be
'needy' of Iason for a better word. But once again that does not mean its love, but seems to be more security. Need can assimilate love in actions, as did the friendship Riki felt for Guy assimilated love. But it never reached or became that. So somewhere there has to be a revelation for Riki to make the difference almost a physical blow, so he can at some point turn around and say "I love him" and know that he really means it.
If a story is good, length is not an issue. . . keep going, can't wait to see what happens next :)
Raoul is as always the voice of reason here but even his explanation of Iason to Riki doesn't change the fact that Riki doesn't have 'feelings' as such for Iason. He might have the 'hots' for Iason, and after watching Raoul and Guy, it is no wonder he just about jumps him at the door, but that still doesn't change the basis of his feelings towards him.
As to Iason, that convoluted mess of emotions, would he even take into account anything Raoul would say to him? Or would it anger him that Riki even spoke to Raoul in this manner?
He might be annoyed at Raoul for revealing their past, but Raoul is his equal, Riki is his pet and talking to another Blondie about his master. . . well, as I've said before, the man might be able to conduct meetings but when it comes to his pet, he is an emotional mind field.
So how do you get them on the same page? Does Iason break Riki into loving him or does the Pet break the Master into changing his ways, and therefore making the master more appealing to the pet?
At this stage, Riki appears to be
'needy' of Iason for a better word. But once again that does not mean its love, but seems to be more security. Need can assimilate love in actions, as did the friendship Riki felt for Guy assimilated love. But it never reached or became that. So somewhere there has to be a revelation for Riki to make the difference almost a physical blow, so he can at some point turn around and say "I love him" and know that he really means it.
If a story is good, length is not an issue. . . keep going, can't wait to see what happens next :)
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July 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Thank you!!!You are the reason why I registered with AFF.net. This story is amazing!!! I am constantly checking to see if you have updated yet.Please keep up the good work!!!
And thank you again because you have inspired me to write again!!
And thank you again because you have inspired me to write again!!
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July 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi!!!! What an amazing chapter!!! definitively, i love Raoul...at least in your fic...He is soo SWEAT!!! >///<
I'm amazed how he know all of them so well: Iason, Guy and Riki, he undestand them perfectly and act as a consequent of that knowledge.
From this chapter i get the hope Riki will be more...open to see, or like...see what's behind Iason actions and undestand his unspoken words...i just wish that.
And for Guy, that he open his hearth to Raoul. Both of tehm deserve it.
See you later!!!
I'm amazed how he know all of them so well: Iason, Guy and Riki, he undestand them perfectly and act as a consequent of that knowledge.
From this chapter i get the hope Riki will be more...open to see, or like...see what's behind Iason actions and undestand his unspoken words...i just wish that.
And for Guy, that he open his hearth to Raoul. Both of tehm deserve it.
See you later!!!
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July 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well you've certainly created a conundrum here. Because chances are very good that Guy still has feelings towards Riki. Riki loves (but is not 'in' love) with Guy. Iason is a jealous fool, and Raoul. . . well what can Raoul really do? You can't force someone to stop loving someone, and you can't force someone to fall in love with you either (can someone please sit down and explain that concept to Iason :) )
And Raoul seems to be honest on top of everything else, so I can't see him using trickery(as compared to Iason's thuggery) to separate Guy and Riki emotionally. So as I said you've laid out a very complex puzzle here, and it will be fun watching you solve it.
Of course if Guy doesn't have feelings anymore for Riki then the above is just a moot point, but if you go that way, then I think you are going to lose a lot of the possible drama you could develop going along the more complicated lines. . .
Well, here's to more fun and games in the next chapter. . .
looking forward to see what you have instore for us next.:)
And Raoul seems to be honest on top of everything else, so I can't see him using trickery(as compared to Iason's thuggery) to separate Guy and Riki emotionally. So as I said you've laid out a very complex puzzle here, and it will be fun watching you solve it.
Of course if Guy doesn't have feelings anymore for Riki then the above is just a moot point, but if you go that way, then I think you are going to lose a lot of the possible drama you could develop going along the more complicated lines. . .
Well, here's to more fun and games in the next chapter. . .
looking forward to see what you have instore for us next.:)
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July 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Helo there you again!!! First of all, thanks a lot for updating so soon!!! You are the only author i know it does so....so, thanks again!!!
And second, about the chapter...poor Riki, and to the hell with whoever was hurting him!!! I wish Iason will do something...or maybe not. After all, gratefully nothing happens and if Iason makes his way on them...Bbbrrrrr...scary....
I understant Raoul plan, but...i don't know...he actually think he can control those two together? Well, maybe what he say to Iason it's true...about poor beaten Guy won't be able to move even his hand but...well, let's just see...
By the way, I love jealous Iason!!! Jajajaja, and everybody see it!!!! XD
And second, about the chapter...poor Riki, and to the hell with whoever was hurting him!!! I wish Iason will do something...or maybe not. After all, gratefully nothing happens and if Iason makes his way on them...Bbbrrrrr...scary....
I understant Raoul plan, but...i don't know...he actually think he can control those two together? Well, maybe what he say to Iason it's true...about poor beaten Guy won't be able to move even his hand but...well, let's just see...
By the way, I love jealous Iason!!! Jajajaja, and everybody see it!!!! XD
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July 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Rhetorical question for you, have you read the novels at all? I'm up to book 4 and so far I'm amazed at what a thug Iason is, something I don't think came across in the anime or in the fanfics I've read. But your Iason at this stage is a complete thug. Brutal, self indulgent, and so far no idea of how to achieve his goal, let alone what his goal really is. Which once more makes me question how can this thug have no idea how to handle/charm Riki, when he is in charge of the Syndicate and has to ooze charm on a full time basis.
Even his gloating at where the pet ring is. He screams he wants to control him, and yet when he did control him (The part where Riki was 'broken') he goes straight away to fix him. . . because he doesn't want him broken, or control him. He wants the fire and spirit and if you control someone, you aren't going to have that. Can Raoul actually at some point sit down and explain this to him, because this is so totally going over his blonde head :)
The car scene shows power, but whose? Yes, Iason took Riki, but he could have just as easily told him to jerk off, or let him jerk himself off. . .more or less a control tactic. But instead he sucks him off, giving his 'pet' pleasure and making sure that as much as he has marked his pet, his pet has marked him as well.
As to Raoul and Guy. . . too calm before the storm perhaps, and a good chance not even a storm of their own making. My guess is that they are going to flounder because of what ever happens between Iason & Riki. And lets not forget Jupiter. . .I'm sure somewhere along the line she has to make her displeasure shown.
So am I still mindreading?
looking forward to the next chapter :)
Even his gloating at where the pet ring is. He screams he wants to control him, and yet when he did control him (The part where Riki was 'broken') he goes straight away to fix him. . . because he doesn't want him broken, or control him. He wants the fire and spirit and if you control someone, you aren't going to have that. Can Raoul actually at some point sit down and explain this to him, because this is so totally going over his blonde head :)
The car scene shows power, but whose? Yes, Iason took Riki, but he could have just as easily told him to jerk off, or let him jerk himself off. . .more or less a control tactic. But instead he sucks him off, giving his 'pet' pleasure and making sure that as much as he has marked his pet, his pet has marked him as well.
As to Raoul and Guy. . . too calm before the storm perhaps, and a good chance not even a storm of their own making. My guess is that they are going to flounder because of what ever happens between Iason & Riki. And lets not forget Jupiter. . .I'm sure somewhere along the line she has to make her displeasure shown.
So am I still mindreading?
looking forward to the next chapter :)