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November 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ahh! Nooo! I dun want Katze to get terminated... :: sniffle sniffle :: I'm sad to see this finished, though it does lead to a new beginning like your note said. Though I really am sad. It has been an excellent story and full of ups and downs. Though I hope to see more in the future... Best wishes.
-Sheleeta
-Sheleeta
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November 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I think we both knew that this would be a Not Happy Jan chapter, but I have to admit that I didn’t think I would be as upset as I was by it.
Now, I am not saying the writing wasn’t brilliant, or that you shouldn’t have gone there. As an author you have a story to write and can write it anyway you like. But the ending here cut into an emotional level that I know I try to avoid. I’m the one who reads the ends of books to make sure I ‘like it’ or can cope with it. I know that in RL there are no Happily ever afters, which is why I like my stories to at least have characters satisfied where they ended up.
We can even go and say that in ANK itself Riki and Iason died, what’s satisfying about that? And my reply is, yes they died, but in their final moments, they found each other. They came together as equals and so even though they died and it was tragic at least they were together in the end.
So why has this ending killed me.....because it is utterly devoid of hope. Katze said in an earlier chapter “You’ll all close ranks!” He expects nothing from anyone. He doesn’t believe that Raoul would flout the A1. Iason is handing him over. Donavon is loyal, but a mongrel and no power where he is going. And Admon….well question mark indeed. We know that Admon will do what he can, but it is too early in the chapter to impact on the end, and Katze doesn’t have a clue.
Katze at that ending, has become a victim being marched off by a Blondie Nazi to an Auschwitz knowing his time is up. And what really nailed it was everything was fine. He and Raoul had reached a place of real understanding. The sun was shining. And for once everything seemed right in his world.
And then the bomb dropped and the story ended.
As I once said to you, if this was a beginning and not an ending, I would have sat back to enjoy the story, waiting for that satisfying ending.
Instead it’s the ending. And even though another story is coming. It doesn’t change the fact that at the end here, there is no hope, no smirk, no bravado. Katze walks off with Iason almost in a catatonic state. He has shut himself off, a dead man walking….exactly the kind of endings I try to avoid at all costs…..
“sigh”
Now, I am not saying the writing wasn’t brilliant, or that you shouldn’t have gone there. As an author you have a story to write and can write it anyway you like. But the ending here cut into an emotional level that I know I try to avoid. I’m the one who reads the ends of books to make sure I ‘like it’ or can cope with it. I know that in RL there are no Happily ever afters, which is why I like my stories to at least have characters satisfied where they ended up.
We can even go and say that in ANK itself Riki and Iason died, what’s satisfying about that? And my reply is, yes they died, but in their final moments, they found each other. They came together as equals and so even though they died and it was tragic at least they were together in the end.
So why has this ending killed me.....because it is utterly devoid of hope. Katze said in an earlier chapter “You’ll all close ranks!” He expects nothing from anyone. He doesn’t believe that Raoul would flout the A1. Iason is handing him over. Donavon is loyal, but a mongrel and no power where he is going. And Admon….well question mark indeed. We know that Admon will do what he can, but it is too early in the chapter to impact on the end, and Katze doesn’t have a clue.
Katze at that ending, has become a victim being marched off by a Blondie Nazi to an Auschwitz knowing his time is up. And what really nailed it was everything was fine. He and Raoul had reached a place of real understanding. The sun was shining. And for once everything seemed right in his world.
And then the bomb dropped and the story ended.
As I once said to you, if this was a beginning and not an ending, I would have sat back to enjoy the story, waiting for that satisfying ending.
Instead it’s the ending. And even though another story is coming. It doesn’t change the fact that at the end here, there is no hope, no smirk, no bravado. Katze walks off with Iason almost in a catatonic state. He has shut himself off, a dead man walking….exactly the kind of endings I try to avoid at all costs…..
“sigh”
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November 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(38) There's always been something off about Jupiter, it never felt right but I hadn't really thought about just how creepy it is. Hearing how it kept and used children though definitely gives it a creep factor. (i know, creep factor, not very eloquent but i think you get the point ;) I can't wait to see what becomes of it in the next part, does something happen to make a change or is it too big and too entrenched to fail, updates can't come soon enough :)
It's amazing as you read how everything seems so mundane and everyday and yet you can feel the tension building because you're waiting for it to all come crashing down. And then the end when everything changes and you knew it would it was only a matter of time and it seems that Katze knew it too. So as I feared no happy ending but at least there's another part to look forward to, whether good or bad I suppose we'll have to wait and see.
And something that really isn't about the story but your author notes because I did love what you said about the original.^^ I always thought it was the relationships and connections the characters had to each other and how all their different lives wove together to create the story that we saw, it was always too complex to just be about yaoi. This is something that you captured really well with your own story, while the guys were always hot and sexy you never lost sight of the fact that that wasn't what it was about, it was their lives whether glamorous or rough and how they managed to (or not) come together. And while we all wish for happy endings, in this universe it isn't really made for that and sadly if your going to get a happy ending you have to work for it and even then they aren't guaranteed.
I get the feeling that something big is going to happen, what that something is I wouldn't even begin to guess but I can't wait to see what the next part entails :) As always I hope everything's going good at your end and I will certainly be waiting to see what you have in store for us next ^_^
It's amazing as you read how everything seems so mundane and everyday and yet you can feel the tension building because you're waiting for it to all come crashing down. And then the end when everything changes and you knew it would it was only a matter of time and it seems that Katze knew it too. So as I feared no happy ending but at least there's another part to look forward to, whether good or bad I suppose we'll have to wait and see.
And something that really isn't about the story but your author notes because I did love what you said about the original.^^ I always thought it was the relationships and connections the characters had to each other and how all their different lives wove together to create the story that we saw, it was always too complex to just be about yaoi. This is something that you captured really well with your own story, while the guys were always hot and sexy you never lost sight of the fact that that wasn't what it was about, it was their lives whether glamorous or rough and how they managed to (or not) come together. And while we all wish for happy endings, in this universe it isn't really made for that and sadly if your going to get a happy ending you have to work for it and even then they aren't guaranteed.
I get the feeling that something big is going to happen, what that something is I wouldn't even begin to guess but I can't wait to see what the next part entails :) As always I hope everything's going good at your end and I will certainly be waiting to see what you have in store for us next ^_^
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November 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I find myself agreeing with you on looking at AnK as not a yaoi fic. I've always found the characters to be my main focus never the fact of who their love interests were (okay so maybe that's not completely true ;p)
That being said...
This new beginnings comment at the end, does that mean that in Riki and Iason's story Katze and Raoul's story will continue on?? I hope so lol you just cant leave a gal hang'n like this!
And also, is Riki and Guy experiments also? Or did i totally misread that?
I cant wait for the next story! made my day when i was this was updated :D thanks so much :)
That being said...
This new beginnings comment at the end, does that mean that in Riki and Iason's story Katze and Raoul's story will continue on?? I hope so lol you just cant leave a gal hang'n like this!
And also, is Riki and Guy experiments also? Or did i totally misread that?
I cant wait for the next story! made my day when i was this was updated :D thanks so much :)
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October 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Noooo... please no sad ending... I no wanna cry... :( I'm looking forward to the next installment though. You are an amazing writer.
-Sheleeta
-Sheleeta
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October 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(37) Atmosphere is one of my favourite things about a story especially when it's done well and the beginning of this chapter and the description of Raoul's world was perfectly wonderful :) Then we also have the dialogue which I adore and I think one of your strengths, really I would have a difficult time picking a favourite between the two ^_^
I was trying to think of something to say about Donovan and Guy but really all I came up with was - Finally :) I did love Guy sitting and appreciating Donovan, even if he had only admitted it to himself it's nice that he acknowledged the attraction. Although personally I'm glad Donovan got to hear and who knows maybe that helped make up his mind to give himself to Guy.
It's interesting that it was Raoul who wanted the change in eye colour and not Niiro just doing it to look like Katze and get Raoul's attention, talk about going out of your way for a crush. It's actually a little sad that they've been pining for each other for so long and yet because of society have been unable to act on it and now that they have finally been able to I'm a little afraid it's going to turn into one of those tragic romances.
I dread the final chapter and yet I'm anxious for it, I keep telling myself to trust you but the ending of this chapter was more than enough to make me feel a sense of dread for what's about to happen. While I give Iason points for allowing Katze and Raoul to have some time, I would have hoped he would find a way to work this out without either of them getting hurt or risking his tenuous relationship with Riki because he's right about what would happen if he ever found out. Here's crossing my fingers that you like happy endings even though I know that in the AnK universe those seem to be hard to come by.
On a happier note I hope you and your family have a great long weekend and a Happy Thanksgiving! ^_^
I was trying to think of something to say about Donovan and Guy but really all I came up with was - Finally :) I did love Guy sitting and appreciating Donovan, even if he had only admitted it to himself it's nice that he acknowledged the attraction. Although personally I'm glad Donovan got to hear and who knows maybe that helped make up his mind to give himself to Guy.
It's interesting that it was Raoul who wanted the change in eye colour and not Niiro just doing it to look like Katze and get Raoul's attention, talk about going out of your way for a crush. It's actually a little sad that they've been pining for each other for so long and yet because of society have been unable to act on it and now that they have finally been able to I'm a little afraid it's going to turn into one of those tragic romances.
I dread the final chapter and yet I'm anxious for it, I keep telling myself to trust you but the ending of this chapter was more than enough to make me feel a sense of dread for what's about to happen. While I give Iason points for allowing Katze and Raoul to have some time, I would have hoped he would find a way to work this out without either of them getting hurt or risking his tenuous relationship with Riki because he's right about what would happen if he ever found out. Here's crossing my fingers that you like happy endings even though I know that in the AnK universe those seem to be hard to come by.
On a happier note I hope you and your family have a great long weekend and a Happy Thanksgiving! ^_^
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October 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I would have never expected Iason to be the one to split Raoul and Katze up! To think that with all the trouble he went through to keep Riki he would come between them....sad :< Please say they will have a happy ending?
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October 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
If this chapter is all about perspective, then mine is that Iason Mink is one of the coldest, hard hearted pricks around, without one sense of loyalty to anyone but himself. He might be ‘the’ Elite’, but in the scheme of things he is an opportunist of the first order, and gladly protects his own back without thought or care for his ‘gang’. For all he looks down his nose at Guy, at least I know that Bison and Guy would stand to the man to protect their own. Whereas, Iason knows that if Riki finds out, he will be furious and unforgiving. He knows again that Raoul who has watched his back from the beginning will walk away from him. And practically, he also knows that Katze would expect no better from him. If it was Riki, he would be working around the clock trying to come up with every scheme in the book to save him, but this is Katze, and for him an easy throw away...unless there is something else here you are not saying and keeping for that last chapter.....which of course is another issue....
Because if the next chapter is the last one, it would have to be one huge ass thing to cover everything properly. And I have to admit, I am seeing a hanging ending at this stage....An Empire Strikes Back scenario, or worse “A Lady or the Tiger” ending.....so as we say here....”Not Happy Jan”. . .
So other than your Iason and the impossible ending, the rest of the chapter in regard to certain characters was pure magic. The juxtaposition of the poetry from Raoul’s and Katze’s room to the earthy feelings from Donavon and Guy really brought everything to completion in the emotion department. They’ve all grown since the beginning, and have come to trust and be honest with each other. Which again is miles away from where the traitorous Mink is with his mongrel.
I’m not going to touch Sir UP His Ass’s mechanizations here. Similar to Iason, he wants to kill the Kat, to protect his own back. And except for the fact that he is a loud mouth and Iason is stone quiet, I’m finding them too similar at the moment as they both move towards their current goal.
The only thing amiss in Iason’s plan is he forgot one little thing. Deek. So the question now becomes, does Deek have enough loyality to Raoul to tell him before Katze walks out that door that Iason was there this morning...And if given that information would Raoul take it into consideration, and keep Katze by his side, or tell him to get Donavon to collect him. Or does Deek remain silent, because he can’t stand the upstart Ex Furniture and let things just happen....because it’s safer to stay quiet.
So, if your purpose was to disturb, upset, and leave me tense and miserable, you’ve done a wonderful job....::wink::
Because if the next chapter is the last one, it would have to be one huge ass thing to cover everything properly. And I have to admit, I am seeing a hanging ending at this stage....An Empire Strikes Back scenario, or worse “A Lady or the Tiger” ending.....so as we say here....”Not Happy Jan”. . .
So other than your Iason and the impossible ending, the rest of the chapter in regard to certain characters was pure magic. The juxtaposition of the poetry from Raoul’s and Katze’s room to the earthy feelings from Donavon and Guy really brought everything to completion in the emotion department. They’ve all grown since the beginning, and have come to trust and be honest with each other. Which again is miles away from where the traitorous Mink is with his mongrel.
I’m not going to touch Sir UP His Ass’s mechanizations here. Similar to Iason, he wants to kill the Kat, to protect his own back. And except for the fact that he is a loud mouth and Iason is stone quiet, I’m finding them too similar at the moment as they both move towards their current goal.
The only thing amiss in Iason’s plan is he forgot one little thing. Deek. So the question now becomes, does Deek have enough loyality to Raoul to tell him before Katze walks out that door that Iason was there this morning...And if given that information would Raoul take it into consideration, and keep Katze by his side, or tell him to get Donavon to collect him. Or does Deek remain silent, because he can’t stand the upstart Ex Furniture and let things just happen....because it’s safer to stay quiet.
So, if your purpose was to disturb, upset, and leave me tense and miserable, you’ve done a wonderful job....::wink::
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October 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
It's so hard to believe that the next chapter will be the last one. The question is how will the story end?
I know that ultimately what you decide will be right for your characters, you know better, so no pressure. Their fate is in your hands.
P.S. Thank you so much for your hard work on this wonderful story, your time and this incredibly touching dedication, which means so much to me.
With all my heart,
Marina
I know that ultimately what you decide will be right for your characters, you know better, so no pressure. Their fate is in your hands.
P.S. Thank you so much for your hard work on this wonderful story, your time and this incredibly touching dedication, which means so much to me.
With all my heart,
Marina
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September 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hello, dear author !
First of all, I would like to thank you for this wonderful story! Your writing style is amazing!
I have seen the portrait of Katze (by Kir-Tat), you mentioned, and it`s really impressive, absolutely beautiful, but isn't it a little unfair to Raoul not to portray him as well?
To solve this ` injustice` I decided to draw another illustration for the story and…voila…here is my Sir Raoul Am: http://mazarinem.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d2zoe2f
This illustration is a gift from me, so feel free if you wish to use it. I hope you`ll like it (and sorry for my English, I'm trying to improve)
First of all, I would like to thank you for this wonderful story! Your writing style is amazing!
I have seen the portrait of Katze (by Kir-Tat), you mentioned, and it`s really impressive, absolutely beautiful, but isn't it a little unfair to Raoul not to portray him as well?
To solve this ` injustice` I decided to draw another illustration for the story and…voila…here is my Sir Raoul Am: http://mazarinem.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d2zoe2f
This illustration is a gift from me, so feel free if you wish to use it. I hope you`ll like it (and sorry for my English, I'm trying to improve)