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by ElegantPaws

person Anise
schedule November 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
(13) This chapter just seems like one big setup for things to come and I’m definitely leaning towards dread for this meeting. I can’t believe Katze brought Admon with him - for a genius he sure can be dumb sometimes. If he keeps doing things like this he’s never going to get a moments peace, of course while this may or more likely definitely stir things up, it may also have the bonus of starting to get us some answers *fingers crossed* There’s so many things going on right now and Admon is quite the little mystery all on his own. And on a side note, you almost can’t help but wonder if Admon can actually compel people to do things besides the pheromones, he certainly gets his way an awful lot. I don’t actually believe that, I think he’s just an expert manipulator but it is interesting to see everyone just fall under his spell ;)

I wonder if Katze feels sometimes that he never really stopped being a furniture, especially when you have to deal with Riki on a regular bases, can’t wait to see if he helps or hurts the situation. And Riki was great in this he’s such a little brat, he’s fighting so hard against what he wants and feels and I wonder how long it’s going to take for him to admit to himself what he wants. Course it seems most of the guys are in some form of denial or another.

Last couple of things, loved the dialogue between Raoul and Iason at the beginning there, made me think of stuffy old English lords. And Donovan and Guy still frustrate me to no end because they obviously like each other, they just need to get over themselves and admit what they want (and stop playing games would be nice too) ;)

I’ve given up trying to come up with short reviews and just go with whatever happens to pop into my head :) And I also wanted to thank you for the email it was sweet that you took that time to respond even though by that point you didn’t have to, it was nice to know I hadn’t been forgotten *hugs* This chapter definitely makes me anxious for the next update, it’s going to be eventful I’m sure ^_^
schedule November 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
He, he, Riki! Riki! Riki is the best! He is just ... such a mongrel, I love him, I'm mad about him! I have just one question, though ... Won't Iason mind Riki sniffing around gorgeous males, such as Admon? I bet Riki's ass would do be in a lot of trouble for less. I just loved the scene with Katze and him. And Riki is really, really smart. Now that he knows who fucked Katze, what would he do? From what I've seen, there's no lost love between him and Raoul, and that's very cannon like. By the looks of it, he doesn't think that it's such a great idea for Katze to get involved with that Blondie. Is he sensing some danger for our lovely redhead?

I guess I surprised this time by not starting with my favorite couple, Guy/Donovan, but I liked Riki so much, especially since it's his first appearance in your story. Such a great debut! Hm, so Riki doesn't mind Guy fucking someone else ... he seems very ok with it, but will he let Guy know about it? Is he ever allowed to talk to Guy? Because I understand that distance is advised, and Katze is watching over things.

Now Guy is really dumb. How could he?! His mind is really in a turmoil, if he doesn't get it! And Donovan is such a teddy bear here! I would have snuggled him so close! But, I guess they're males, and snuggling is out of the question, and something better and hotter could have happened ... Damn you, Guy! You better prepare for some protection, 'cause Riki dearest doesn't seem so interested in caring for your ass anymore!

I hope that he will begin to see things clearer. Or maybe Donovan will have to chain him to a wall and fuck him into oblivion, until he understands that he is so much liked. But that's just my take, I cannot wait for you to surprise me with more twists and turns!

A lot of strange things are happening, especially between Katze and Admon. Admon knows Raoul, but he is such a liar, and Katze knows. Do I get the wrong feeling that Raoul and that ex-Master of Admon are overlapping at some point? You have me on the edge of my seat, dear author, and I cannot wait for more!

I must admit that Katze's decision to take Admon with him is very surprising. Is he trying to use Admon's skills to get a glimpse of a particular Blondie's thoughts? Yet he knows is a mistake, and there is, of course, the matter of what the Karinese and him shared, that painful memory ...

Iason knows! I have a great laugh! Will Raoul get a little chiding, like a little child? "I know who you fucked last summer ... " or something like that!

Great chapter, great chapter, I have no words to say everything ... especially since I only read the story twice, and, with you, I really need to take my time to get the grasp of things.

Thank you for this exquisite piece, and I beg you to keep writing!
schedule November 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi there! As ai tell you before, i didn't understand a big part of the words or more like the ideas, but that end...it was perfectly clear!!
I love Riky! He is just hilarious!!!
Hope to see you soon. It's really.....INTERESTING your fic, for say the least....
See you.
person barrie18
schedule November 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
A very auspicious beginning. . .we start where we finished last time. . and more confusion is added to the chain of events.

There is a connection between Katze and Admon. One that according to Admon shouldn't exist. . .between him and a mongrel. So is there something more to Katze's past than even he is aware of?

And Admon knows Raoul. . .but does he 'know' Raoul or know 'of' Raoul. Two very different things. We know he is lying, but in which direction.

There is still the mysterious previous Master that Admon still acknowledges and wants to get back to while currently acknowledging Katze as his new master.

"His Master had appreciated this simple task that had sensual qualities all its own. It was part and parcel of their nightly ritual, their secret and their unspoken form of communication. It had taken a year to bed his Master with mixed results. In the end he wasn’t wanted, another was. He stood in lieu, but this was acceptable. He benefitted with safety, sanctuary and a purpose beyond the usual Pets of his Master’s station, who had only the choice of performance."

If that doesn't scream Iason, I don't know what does. The only thing I can't work out is, is Admon still working for Iason behind the scenes, or is this his own agenda we are seeing, in that strange mind of his that works on so many different levels at once.

He knows who the Green in Katze's mind is, but does he know who the "vibrant' personality that has popped into the picture is? Interesting conundrum happening there, if I am on the right path. :)

Interesting to is when Admon moves away and takes his pheromones with him, it is Raoul, who takes precedent in Katze's mind, as he immediately realizes that Red is not Raoul's colour. . . even though he will be 'drinking the stars' tonight with Admon.

A very curious phrase that too. Is it a real one related to wine, or one of your own creation? Either way, here it takes on many different meanings again.

Enjoying a magnificent wine with your senses, or two lovers drinking of each other. The stars the complete sensory overload of not only the physical but the mental as well.. .

The phrase again is used later between Raoul and Iason. With Iason the master of all things sensory, not pleased with Raoul's expression.

And things don't seem as settled as we thought. Jupiter may have let Iason have "his dark Mongrel", but it seems she still doesn't quite understand it. Rather like a possessive mother, delving away, trying to find the source of the attraction.

But stil there is more here than meets the eye, almost a by play of Guy and Donovan. It would seem Katze and Iason are almost on the same page when dealing with their right hand men and possible relationships that could cause problems.

Riki, well Riki is the breathe of fresh air at the moment. He is not dressing things up, or putting colours to things. He is as straight shooting as they come, without an agenda. . .at the moment. . . Once again, if I am right on one thing. . .then Riki might look at things differently as well in the future.

Guy and Donovan. . .well Admon is correct. Guy is the Erratic one. And Riki is right too. If Donovon took him on as a pairing partner, it would give him more balance. But Guy is too angry at the world to deal with it in straight terms, and in the end the anger is what is going to destroy any hope he has of happiness.

Katze is right of course about 'clouds'. .
How does one know happiness if they don't experience some darkness in their lives. At the same time, how does one recognize 'love, affection, a real feeling', if they've never experienced a purely pheromone produced one, one based on lust and crude want rather than heartfelt desire and wanting.

After his drinking of the the stars with Admon, will Katze, recognize the difference and see it for what it is, as easily as he recognized earlier that Red is not Raoul.



And once again, that very curious last paragraph. A challenge has been issued. Raoul is probably the one who is seeing green, but then again a Blondie's pride is a curious thing, and even Iason might not be too pleased to see an Ex Pet taken with his Ex Furniture.

Once again, it was a chapter where one has to look closely to understand the depth of what is truly going on here, and even then, the clues we think we see, might just be us over thinking as well :)

Hope the next half of this comes soon. It will be interesting to see who is drinking stars with whom. ..
person Anise
schedule October 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
(12) Well that ending was very interesting, I can't help but think that learning about Admon's history will help to answer some of Katze's questions, not only about that Ruby but Raoul too. I came to the conclusion that Raoul's Ruby is the master that Admon is waiting for and since Katze had seen the picture and can't help but be thinking about it it drew a strong reaction on both their parts. Of course that's just a guess for all we know Admon could have been Raoul's pet, whatever the connection it seems fate is rather insistent about throwing Raoul at Katze whether he wants it or not, poor boy could this day get any worse. Okay yes it can, he does have to talk to Raoul at some point which is going to be challenging on it's own but if Katze continues to be distracted he could find himself in a bit of a mess.

And speaking of bad days we have Guy who again is just so frustrating, it's like he can't just stop and think about what's being done and said around him. He's all emotion but I think sometimes we forget just how dangerous he can be especially if you become the object of his interest - psychotically inclined, is putting it mildly. But I do like that show of trust in Donovan that Katze showed by giving him a chance to see if he can get through to Guy but I don't know that Guy can change his ways. He reminds me of an abuser, the chance of them finding a relationship and not resorting to old ways is slim at best, it's entirely understandable why Katze is wary.

On a nicer note I loved how you weaved Katze's ponderings about the flower into what was actually happening and the symbolism of that really stood out to me, it was amazingly good.^^ But I think that Kato might be slightly horrified when he learns about what happened to his flower seeing as how much effort (and money) went into that surprise. Again though the connection between Kato and Katze was wonderfully shown there, it definitely seems like one of Katze's less complicated relationships (at least he has one).

Another wonderful chapter, it's such a fascinating and complex story with so much going on all around, makes for really great drama. Although since one of the main themes of this seems to be obsession it can't help but be complicated. I always love seeing new chapters from you and I just can't seem to stop myself from rambling on endlessly about what you write. And apparently I'm getting worse since I even had to divide this into paragraphs, short and concise don't seem to exist in my world :) I think I have typed more than enough for one night and I can now go and try to wait patiently for the next chapter, I'm sure it'll be just as good as all the others ^_^
schedule October 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, my, thank you, thank you, thank you for this! I don't know about others, but me, I feel incredibly spoiled with this last chapter! Guy and Donovan, yay! The best, the best, the best! So, Guy is more than a little bit dense, and he doesn't get a clue that actually Donovan is trying to save him from a terrible fate, seeing that Katze has strong intentions about him, if the 'little drama' continues. I hope that he understands from Donovan's kisses, that there could be another way of doing things. That was incredibly hot, the scene in that cell, ... Guy just wanting a good long fuck before kicking the bucket, so to speak. I especially loved how you showed his feelings when he was taken by Donovan the first time, the fact that he felt lustful over the big hung male pounding his body ... He tries so hard to deny it, it makes me smile like crazy! Where will they go from there? Donovan will want him alive and kicking, but how about Katze? He truly sees Guy as a liability, and he seems unwilling to give him too much room to play his madness that once took Iason and Riki down.

It was especially rewarding how Guy reacted in jealousy, feeling the scent of that pet on Donovan, knowing that 'the little shit' sucked off Donovan, seeing it, and yet not even guessing that Donovan could not help but think of his mad gray eyes, while releasing in that skillful mouth ... Katze is right, indeed: Guy wants Donovan, but he seems to be too stupid to acknowledge his own feelings about this. I just hope that he will realize in time - and that he is given the needed time - to see that Donovan really wants him, and that he wants Donovan, and that they can hit it off.

How Guy meditated about his wretched life on the brink of 'supposed' death - as Donovan doesn't get down there to take him down - oh, that was good. 'No more hunger, no more pain ...' I feel like walking in Guy's shoes in scenes like that, and I guess that makes you a wonderful writer.

Now, I seem to talk only about my favorite couple, and ignore the rest, but I will talk about them as well. After all, you wrote 22 pages, and you deserve much more appreciation than I could give through this humble review.

It was much more than a nice touch to point out some little things, like the flower, Katze's reaction, and Kato's secret smile. Clearly, the servant knows how much his boss actually appreciates real beauty, so he knows that Katze won't really mind spending some on such - apparently useless - items. And Katze loves the color... How could he not? After all, his mind is driving to that Ruby, and his conclusion is only natural about the name to give to that particular color.

So, Admon is Karinese. I learned from the book what a Karinese is and I love how you use this here. This is, indeed, an intriguing character, meant to play an important role. Yet, Katze is so strong, and worthy of my - and anybody's - admiration, as he knows well how to protect his thoughts from the invading Empathe. And the fact that Admon knew that Donovan was thinking about Guy during climax ... he, he, nice touch indeed. What would be his role from now on ... that depends on your imagination only, and I cannot wait to see where this is going.

A great chapter, long and rewarding, and we didn't even get the chance to see much of our favorite Elites. I bet they will make their part as soon as the rightful owner of this incredibly beautiful universe - meaning you - finds it right.

I may sound like a suck up, but what can I say? Your story is just incredible! I've never thought that I would find my favorite AnK story to be one where Riki/Iason don't have an important part. You changed my ways, lady! You have all my respect.

Oh, I guess it was a long one. And I still don't think I said enough to complement you for the joy you brought for me. You are the best writer in the fanfiction universe I've ever had the chance to stumble upon.

My humble thanks are not enough, yet I beg you to accept them.

Until next time, have a nice life!
person barrie18
schedule October 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
The chapter opens with a rare fragile flower, with a speculative Katze admiring it and trying to work out what the colour would be called. A colour within moments revealed to represent passion, beauty and hate. A colour that also represents the colour of life in some or death in others depending on where the fluid is. . .in the body or pooling on the floor. . .

A flower that is crushed and destroyed in the middle of the chapter by someone who in his line of work should really know better than to get involved with a Cere's weed.

And lastly, the chapter ends with a dark flash, a quick reference to another sort of flower, also Ruby in nature, that was delicate evoked emotions we are still not aware of and ultimately destroyed.

Once again, I find myself lost in the imagery as you mix colours and circumstance to get your points across.

So Admon is an empath. .. but is he also something more? Something even he is not aware of? The last scene between him and Katze. . .what took place was. . .(your words) 'unexpected' almost clairvoyant in nature. . .channeling? Is this a lost memory of Katze's that has now come to the surface because of the "Ruby" on the wall, that Raoul knew and apparently admired?

And who is the mysterious Master, who might or not return? And what effect will he have on Katze. Because all things seem to play around him. . . There is something more here than meets the eye. As with all your characters Admon is more than he seems and we have to sit back and wait and see exactly what his purpose is.

Green as we know is Katze's hidden colour. .. a sign of rebirth in spring, of new beginnings, but also the shade of someone's eyes, who sees the world in a very rigid way.

Conflicted as always, Katze's quick introspection of Iason and Raoul, and the obsessive nature of the boys with their toys. . . and the quick fury afterwards. He is not a toy, but is being treated as one and because it is a Blondie Elite he can't do a thing about it.

On the otherhand even though he looks at Guy as a loose canon, Guy at least gets to stand up for himself, ready to die on the spot.

“Never mix business with pleasure, particularly with maniacs with control issues who are just as likely to kill you as fuck you with equal indifference.”

“Like you, Boss?”

These prophetic words tell the whole story in one swoop. The innocent jibe that was read the opposite to what he meant. This time Katze is the one being played. . and he knows it.

The two relationships, almost opposites of each other compliment each other. Because if we can understand the dynamics of one, then the other is made clear as well.

But there is always balance in the world and when one goes up, another goes down . . .equilibrium is very hard to achieve at the best of times. So I can't help but feel if one couple succeeds in finding a peace within themselves, the other couple must falter and fail. . .

But that is a long way away, and in the meantime there are more questions to ask, more answers to seek, and hopefully soon more chapters to read. . .:)

person Anise
schedule September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
(11) 'A game with rules only the Elite was apparently privy to.' That right there kind of says it all doesn't it, must be hard for Katze who's used to making his own rules for the most part.
It's amazing just how much story we got in one chapter, Donovan is becoming even more interesting with the hint at some sort of real family, plus his relationships with Guy and Katze and the conflict of that. Then you have Raoul and his weird little fascination with Katze and all things related, even if it's just a music box. Even Deek in this, at first he just seems irritating until the whole two beats thing, at least he has a personality, can't help but wonder where in the world they've all picked that up.
I wonder considering just how much Katze is aware of what's going on with the people around him and in his club, if it was really just a coincidence that Guy saw what happened with the pet. And even the pet knowing that this was it, he knew first hand that there could be a lot worse things than being in the employ of Katze. I wonder if Katze ever thinks that he should just take the pretty pet for himself and be done with the Blondie, of course he probably wouldn't be nearly as interesting as Raoul but definitely an easier companion. Wonderful chapter, I really liked all the different aspects of it, definitely worth the wait :) Hope RL is doing better ^_^
person barrie18
schedule August 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Once again your visuals add to the complexity of the plot. The cat's lair as compared to the dogs hovel(because when is a cat ever called a mongrel) are as explicit in their differences as their occupants personalities.

However, upon saying that, it seems that Guy does have a sense of 'self' pride at least, by the state of the bathroom seen through Donavon's eyes. He might sleep with fleas, but he won't rise up with them. An interesting insight into his character.

Of course this brings up the next part, with the question who is Donovon's brother, and does he play a part in this tale, or is he just a red herring to throw us off track :)

I don't think Donovon will betray Katze, the implication is he has too much too lose, but then we do know in the AnK world hormones do have a way of taking over the brain, and there was just something about that encounter with Guy that hooked him. Perhaps that fresh mouth, that always has a come back combined with other elusive characteristics . .street smarts and pride.

Raoul is still a puzzle about the game he is playing with the cat. I don't even think he understands it himself, as he tries to fix an old music box for his own amusement before sending it off to its rightful owner. Or is it also an unknowing want to send to Katze a 'perfectly' working item that he would enjoy in his leisure even though tainted by Blondie hands.

I really hope that next chapter is another confrontation between these two.

And lastly, the new addition to Katze's lair. Another red herring? or a significant player in the tale? Guy has just walked in and seen the end of the performance, the feeling I get is he is not impressed at all, but logically it gives Donovon the chance to back away from him if he wants to save his own skin. After all he has been warned by the boss.

I have to admit, I don't quite understand where the stuff came from that Sid was ranting about and why Guy wanted it returned...I'm lost there, as I don't want to take anything here at face value.

A very thoughful chapter, with many puzzles to ponder. . Hope RL has eased up a bit. . .and looking forward as always to the next chapter
schedule August 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I feel so rewarded. For sure, you know how to make a girl like me really, really happy. Thank you, thank you! I know that Donovan-Guy pairing is only secondary, but I like it so much, the way you added all these new twists. It gives me the thrills, the way you show that nothing is private. Katze knows where Donovan was, what he had done, with whom. He also knows Donovan is thinking about someone else when the new pet is taking care of him. Deek, Raoul's Furniture, tries to fish for info so he can gossip. Kato has also knowledge about his Boss' habits and Katze teases him about his obsession with food. You are really good at what you do, and your way of telling the story is indeed, unequaled. They all look so bare, in front of our eyes, and I guess that is why I keep reading and reading again your story. When a new chapter is up, I always read it about two or three times before posting the review.

So Raoul has his hands on some interesting device? How will he use it against Katze? Or this is not the point? Will Guy recognize Donovan's genuine interest in him or is he ready (again) to throw everything off the window? And we haven't seen anything of Iason yet, and I read here that Raoul has to go visit him.

Keep it up, I can barely wait for more.

(My email is ankfanforever@yahoo.com, in case you want to drop by :))

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