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by ElegantPaws

person barrie18
schedule March 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
In olden times, Fools or Jesters were the only ones who could get away with the truth, as they wrapped it up in comedic overtones. . .this time the 'Truth' is thrown out there for all to see and understand, even though neither Katze or Raoul will come out and speak directly to the other. . . But oh those barriers are cracking at a furious rate and a faint breeze should blow them over very soon.

Katze has to now rethink his perception of Blondies. . .After all aren't all Blondies like Iason? Cold, reserved, emotions in check because once those emotions are released, they know no restraint? The King is the King no matter where he is. And his people follow suit when out amongst themselves, but in the privacy of their own homes, the truth is out. Raoul Am lives 'simply' for a Blondie, taking pleasure in small things. . .He does not have to hide who he is, because no one would look for it or expect it. And things stay best hidden when out in the open . . .the Purloined Letter being the best example of that fact.

Katze now is coming to realize there is more between him and Raoul then a fling in bed, but he still doesn't expect anything beyond the usual Blondie attitude. And amazingly enough Raoul encourages him in this, because he is beginning to realize a few truths as well. . .For something to be real, you must touch it – "make it yours to complete the sensory experience.” Katze has touched Raoul, has claimed him, has made him his, and Katze just doesn't see it or get it ...yet.

And then once again the truth this time from Katze...."The dumb fuck doesn’t want to admit that he loves Iason.”

"...flushed at the unexpected retort and the implicit, unspoken candor of what was not said."

A truth now hits Raoul in the face and still that wall stands. . . Katze, has just about shouted at him that he loves him, but won't do a thing about it.

Raoul, berates him using Riki as a focus and yet is he anymore honest. . .In the most round about declaration, they have both told each other how they feel, and neither will say it out loud.

And yet jumping ahead, we find out that at some stage Katze was recovering from 'something' and Raoul felt the need to put a tracer in that no one would know of or find, so he could try and keep him safe. . . All Katze hears is he has always been watched. . .and fears for what sounds like his own small kingdom. . . entirely missing the reason behind the facts. Raoul has always cared. .

Perhaps there is more 'heart' in Raoul Am than is permissible in a Blondie. . .He might have stood by Iason's actions, but inwardly not approve. . .he said as much, just now, when looking at Katze's scar. And perhaps all that ranting about Iason bedding a mongrel, was not just a case of preventing Iason from falling off his perfect pedestal, but protecting a mongrel from the perfect Blondie's imperfect temperament. . .after all, he had already seen it first hand...with Katze.

As to his Excellency, who is still twisting things around in that brain of his, so that he is in the right, it's interesting that he doesn't allow Katze to see Riki. . it seems he can't wash the whole thing off even in his own mind, and someone else knowing would only make the damage stick even more. Guilt is a wonderful thing, when the truth won't be allowed. Even tone of voice, is enough to strike a cord. . . but this Iason is stuck in a timewarp, and change is not a possibility. His truth is a warped one based on prejudice, self lies and half truths. . . If Raoul is likened to Summer, and Katze to Autumn, then Iason is certainly the Ice of Winter. . ..

I haven't even gotten to Guy and Donovan, but I don't want to drive you completely made with my dribble. Let me just say that Donovan's telephone call was the most honest dialogue so far. He called it as he saw it. . .And even though Katze could scream over it, he didn't deny it, and if Raoul heard it, he didn't seem bothered by it either. It seems the truth can make itself heard, even in the most round about way.

The story is getting more complicated as it goes along...are you sure only 5 chapters left?

Hope the next update isn't too far away :)
schedule February 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Yes! Another great installment!

So, Iason still remembers about Dana Bahn ... I guess it is natural to be so, seeing what has happened there, and I'm not talking only about the physical pain. Some would have presumed that things should have changed between Iason and Riki after that episode, as they were brought back to life, but still Iason cannot help but being a control freak. It serves him well to be taught a lesson, and he should not hide behind all that "Riki is making me behave like a sexdroid" - or so I remember it from "Dark Erogenous". Clearly, it is more like Iason from the books, where he is such a cold bastard, erotic play included, unfortunately for poor Riki.

But I am sure the title "Phantom pain" is not related only to what Iason feels, but other characters, as well. Katze simply understands what Raoul felt for the Ruby, and I guess he is not that incredibly happy about being the replacement. What exactly is going through Raoul's mind? For now, he seems to be quite straightforward, at least regarding the way he is drawn to Katze sexually, and I really love how you portrayed their little humping, under Deek's eyes. Oh, my, I bet the Furniture almost had a heart attack, seeing that scene, and especially hearing his precious Master's intention of offering oral pleasures to a mongrel. Raoul has no shame, that is so hilarious! He is simply annoyed with being interrupted, that's priceless!

The scene with Guy and Donovan was kind of funny, too. But, after all, Guy is brought closer and closer to admit the fact that Donovan truly knows how to woo him. No pouncing, and I like to see that Guy wasn't expecting that. I would really like to know how things are going to work between the two.

Until next time, have a nice life, dear author!
person barrie18
schedule February 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Once again you've written a chapter that is simple on the outside and yet has so many things hidden within.....or I am just going nuts looking too far below the surface :)

Well lets start with Iason and Riki....When I first read the part, where Sir Mink, was feeling pain in his thighs, I really had a WTF moment. How dare he feel reciprocal pain considering what he did to Riki.. . Even though he writes it off as a residual memory from Dana Bahn, the f*ckhead should feel guilty as hell and experience some of the pain he happily inflicted on his 'pet' to get his rocks off. Even his attitude to Riki wanting to be held and petted after sex. . . when all his Majesty wants to do at that stage is turn over and sleep is selfish selfish selfish. . . .Now he wants to hold him and why. ...guilt pure and simple. . . .and how long will that inclination last Sir Iason, once your mongrel pet is hale and hearty once more?

But lets get to the real sore spot in this chapter. Truthfully, even though it was done very pragmatically, I found it tragically sad that Katze thinks that he is only a substitute for the Ruby, and that he has the courage to tell Raoul he understands this and accepts it. But. . .why do I feel we are being led down a crooked path. . .

Eye colour.....the Ruby's eyes were not originally Katze's colour, but greyish. . . was it only his eyes he changed. . .or other details as he liked to experiment on himself. . . Perhaps he didn't give something to Katze to make him what he is, but took from him instead, to enhance the stagnate Elite genetic code?

And perhaps like Alice through the Looking Glass, we are seeing the picture incorrectly because we don't know a time line in any of this. When did Raoul first meet the Furniture Katze, before or after the Ruby started to experiment on himself. Is it at all possible that the same attraction that Katze always had for the Blondie, was hidden away so deeply in Raoul that he never realized it, but someone else did. And used that 'genetic material' to become the mongrel's shadow and not the other way around. . . . . or once again has my mind gone into twilight zone mode :) And it would be my guess that Admon only knows his past Master with the shared eye colour. . .not the original one, as he was created afterwards.. . .

And before I drive you completely insane....Guy and Donovan. . .We already know what Donavan is like. Loyal to the Boss, and honest in his motives towards Guy.

But this is the first time we get a look at Guy's character, rather than his actions. . . He takes pride in himself, and luxuriates in the joy of even being able to brush his teeth with a decent toothbrush and paste. Crass yes, but he has a brain, and although he can't read well, he can handle numbers with ease. Intelligent, not all hot air and noise. And beneath all that bravado, he would love to get together with Donovan, but similar to many in this story, circumstance and cultural position is getting in the way. . . These two are running a similar path to a Blondie and a Redhead, I just wonder if a certain Empath is going to make sure all paths cross before we reach an ending.....and whether it is going to be a happy one or not....

I could go on in analysis, but I won't. . .let it be said, plenty of information if you know where to look, but no idea what to do with it or where it will lead us.....So Miss EP keep leaving your trail of bread crumbs. . . I'm happy to follow :)

person Sheleeta
schedule February 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Damn... just leaving us hanging... evil evil evil. I am truly enjoying this story and your exploration of the other side of Raoul is much appreciated. I am one who thinks that he and Guy don't get the true attention they deserve, and they are truly complex characters. I await your next installment.
person barrie18
schedule February 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
When I first sat down to read this, I really thought it was simple and straight forward, but then on the second read certain things began to stand out. . .

Admon once again notes that Katze displays characteristics that are "distinctly Elite of sensibility". . .and we know that Sir Niiro not only created Admon, but also was at Katze's modification. . .and something took place there. . . that perhaps altered the mongrel and gave him these Elite sensibilities.

Of course Katze wondering if Raoul has psychic genes, gives pause again. We know, once again from Admon that Raoul does have some ability, the question though is Katze thinks he's being facetous with this thought, but is he reading Raoul as well? These two do have a habit of bouncing off of each other, whether it is in 'polite' conversation or sexual energry.

The use of the 3 Laws of Robotics was brilliant and puts Admon in his place, well at least for the moment. . .but the question remains, why does Katze feel himself endangered that he needs Admon there to be his eyes and ears? Have I forgotten something?

Of course Raoul doesn't recognize that Katze was insulting Elites when he makes his comment "It is only the rare breeds that tend to perpetuate genetic flaws thought to be desirable, generation after generation. They can afford that luxury. We simply die if we can’t pass muster.”

It would be interesting to know, what Katze perceives as genetic flaws in Elites. . .it would be interesting to know if Sir Niiro also saw flaws, where others saw perfection. . .

And lastly, I am not really surprised how Raoul skirts around what happened to Riki. . .Iason's reaction in the previous chapter, shows this isn't one of their usual outcomes. This was a game that crossed the line. . .and I know that I would love to see and hear what Riki and Iason have to say about the whole thing. Or is it just an 'incident' that is pushed aside, as this is just part of Eos and Tanagura society.. . . genetic flaw indeed.

Shall wait very patiently to see what happens next. . .:)
schedule February 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I can really imagine that conversation :)) Laughed a lot, thank you for sharing. 'Did he touch you? Did he kiss you? ....' Raoul, Raoul, and I thought you to be a big boy by now. Not when it comes to love, love, love, it seems. :))

This seemed to be sort of an introduction chapter, right? Exciting things awaits us, while the boys are still getting ready for that auction thingie.

Donovan's reactions towards the artificial nature of Admon ... I guess they are to be expected. He is on the simpler side of things, so it would seem weird enough for him to have shared intimacy with a 'thing', as this is, I bet, how he sees Admon. Katze is lucky to have such a loyal bodyguard, ready to intervene. Hopefully, the situation does not require any bloody interference so far.

Of course, the crux of the matter is the conversation taking place between Raoul and Katze. They are so great and laughable. Katze is still on his toes when, after calling Raoul by his name, he is getting his hand slapped, but gently, I guess. Oh, Katze, but you do know how to land on your two feet, and still joke about it - what is that 'head' you are talking about? (I'll pretend I don't know what it is, since my upbringing forbids me - that's a blatant lie !!!!)

Interesting how the two discuss about Iason and Riki's trysts in bed. While Katze calls them 'sick games', Raoul just finds them 'adventurous', yet we know from the previous chapter, that even Raoul thinks Iason went a little bit too far this time.

But their video phone play is so goooooood. Raoul gets a little hot and bothered, Katze gets a little more because he senses that Raoul is hot and bothered ... love these little erotic parts, even if they cannot touch each other (maybe that is making it so incredibly teasing).

I can hardly wait for the next chapter. Katze was ordered to leave Admon in his room, so what is he going to do? Raoul is still very jealous, even if Katze no longer seems interested in having sex with the android (if he ever was, maybe only in Raoul's rich imagination). Will we get to meet Sir Niiro next time? Why does Katze need Admon?

Until next time, have a nice life, dear author.

PS. You are the one that makes me humble, each time I read your creations. :)
person Anise
schedule February 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(19) Overgrown brat seems to be an entirely appropriate way to describe Raoul, most elites actually. You almost think that Raoul is purposely doing these things to Katze, sadly I don't think he worries to much about how this affects him. Though he did take notice of Katze's eyes and could read the different emotions which does point to the fact that if he wants he can actually be rather aware. Of course if he was so aware of Katze he would leave the guy alone long enough to get some rest, it feels like Katze hasn't slept for days.

I'll admit it now that until last chapter I wasn't entirely sure if Admon was an android or if he was just some unusual alien with very unique abilities. It's those abilities that threw me off, you don't generally think of machinery and emotions going together. Feelings are a decidedly human trait and I would think understanding them to the degree that Admon does isn't something you would see in an android, which shows just how unusual and outstanding Admon is.

Unlike Donovan though, Katze seems to be at ease with Admon and knows how to use him, although he's always been a smart boy so using him to his advantage would make sense. Makes me think of earlier when Katze had said he had dealt with his kind before, did he ever at any point actually think that Admon was an android or was that news to him and he's just that good at adjusting to the situation. I assume he had no idea and he's just that good ^_^

Last little thing, it's interesting that you acknowledged the use of Raoul's name when Katze is addressing him because I had been thinking that you were really good at switching between the two and made it seem completely natural, it could be overdone or forced if not done right but I like how it's worked :)

It's funny I didn't actually think I had all that much to say about the chapter, it seemed to be a setup to the auction that's coming and yet I find myself rambling on (not surprising that)^^ And the closer we get to this auction the more impatient I get for it, I think some very interesting things are going to happen, can't wait for an update - Happy Saturday to you too ^_^
schedule January 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Well, thing get a little complicated, didn't they? 1:Riky. I really didn't get what all that happen...ok...Iason was angry but....OoO''' Amazing development of the scene. Poor Riky...ouch.
2: Admon...so he is a...whatever...some kind of laboratory made creature, with great powers who wants to..? I don't know. As always the language part is a big obstacle for me but, doesn't matter, the fic get better and better with each chapter, specially this last one!!!
Congrats!! Is really one of my fav fics!!! XD
person Anise
schedule January 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(18) ‘…simple boss, he’s hot.’- love Donovan and their interaction, really does Katze need any other reason ;) Also Kato and Katze’s interaction in this chapter was kind of adorable, they’re always good for a smile :)

I’m not sure that sexual trysts are supposed to be this exhausting, it’s amazing how much havoc one Blondie can wreak and Katze curled up on the bed just seems tired and not in the good after sex way. Also this constant need for Raoul to control Katze even within his own place continues to grate on me to no end, if he always wants his own way maybe he should stay home. Seemed to be more of the same with these two but the confrontation between Admon and Raoul was interesting. So do I understand this right, the Ruby was a scientist that created Admon? And there were others, earlier versions I suppose, whatever happened to them. I wonder if Raoul is going to do anything now that he’s made the connection of who Admon is but then if he wants to tell Katze he would then have to explain Sir Niiro, so maybe for now he won’t say anything. It’ll be interesting to see how that all unfolds, especially with those illusions to Jupitar and what it could mean for the society as a whole.

I had just about forgotten about Riki and Iason since we’ve been in Raoul and Katze’s world so much and this was certainly quite the reminder of just how unpredictable it can be around the elites. Amazing how something can go so wrong so quickly, it’s a reminder of just how cruel or maybe careless the elites can be. I think that we had forgotten a little because of just how much leeway Katze had been given at times by Raoul but that was a very dramatic way to bring a point home. Although I think you’re right that when things get this bad, they can only end up getting better. Hopefully Raoul learns something from this and I definitely hope this makes Iason change for the better, can’t wait for Riki’s reaction.

I thought it was a fantastic chapter, so much happened and yet we were still left wondering and wanting more, the next bit should be interesting ^_^
schedule January 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh, so the skies are finally starting to clear around Admon's mystery ... Just a manner of speaking, since Admon seems to be more of a machine, then a person, and one that should be closely related to Jupiter, if I interpret correctly. Even though Admon has empathic abilities, the true question that rises is whether he himself is capable of emotions, or is he just an interpreter of what others feel. What we don't know, Raoul seems to know very well, so what will he do now, seeing that Admon is exactly what Amoi does not need. Again, you get us all entangle in this story of mystery and imagination, especially since it is clearly hinted in the body of the text that Jupiter somehow forgot about its initial purpose. (Btw, I like the nice touch about Jupiter, which you treat like Lambda 3000, the impersonal all mighty computer, like in the books, rather than the feminine representation we all know from the anime.)

Usually, I like to treat the chapter gradually, as the story progresses, but this time around, I will continue with the thing that shocked me most. What seemed to be a game of dominance between Master and pet quickly transformed into tragedy, and I would not have thought Iason to be worse than Raoul in your story. Yet, he is, he does not know when to stop, and, even if it saddens me, I must agree that he is quite in character, as his cruelty is more than obvious in the books, unlike the anime, where his voice is draped in smooth silk when he talk to Riki. This cold Iason is much more like the character imagined by Reiko (except, of course, that you do not let him escape unpunished, and he regrets the extent of his punishment towards Riki - did you, perhaps, want him to suffer for the scene happening towards the end of vol. 6?).

Turning towards less turbulent (by comparison) waters, I love the interaction between Raoul and Katze. They really do seem to get along somehow, and jealous Raoul is just so ... yummy ;) Sir Am is more appeased - maybe all that hot sex had something to do with it - and, despite arrogant choice of words (just a 'decent fuck', Lord Am?), he clearly enjoyed being with Katze more than he is ready to admit. I loved how he insisted that Katze dress up for his meeting with Admon, and how Katze chose some sexy clothes just in spite. This Katze is really something, no wonder Lord Am is falling for him. "I already have what I want". Nicely put, Katze, way to go! You made the Elite squirm in delight under you (no one offers to do some fanart just with that particular scene? I have no talent, or I'll do it!)! Oh, yes, Jupiter would not approve, I'm sure of that!

So funny how people around Katze see the whole affair. Kato is proud to serve such a selective guest, taking out the good good China, and Donovan is practically telling his Boss that it's only normal to fall head over heels for such a hot man. (Btw, what happened with Donovan's long haired obsession?)

Katze still has regrets to deal with, as he thinks Raoul will not stick around for long. I really liked it how he huddled the sheets still keeping Raoul's scent and warmth, that was really touching and sexy in the same time.

Thank you for the new chapter, dear author.

Until next time, have a nice life!

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