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February 21, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Thus far it's pretty good, please continue :)
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November 30, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Whoa... nice Pokegirl AU you have!
I wish I can read more of it, so... please... don't abandon this fanfiction!
See ya...
I wish I can read more of it, so... please... don't abandon this fanfiction!
See ya...
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April 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
cool fic so far. please update soon.
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September 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good work, lovin the idea. Keep it going!
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August 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Not bad! I like your very personal writing style, and it's good that you seem to have a solid grasp on your own author's voice. I also really appreciate that you use italics and bolding as often as you make spelling/grammatical errors. Actually, you use them far more than you make typical rookie mistakes, and believe me, I'm actually looking forward to reading more of your work.
If I might make a suggestion though, try giving us a hook. Y'know, something besides the story summary to draw us in and really make us go "OH DEAR GOD WHY DID YOU LEAVE US HANGING LIKE THIS I AM IN ANGUISH FROM ONLY TWO MINUTES OF NO NEXT CHAPTER PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THAT IS HOLY AND VIBRATORY CONTINUE THE FUCKING STORY". ...That kind of hook. It's an interesting self-insert, sure, but I'm just following along right now because I was in the mood for a Pokegirl story. Do you even have a plot in mind?
If I might make a suggestion though, try giving us a hook. Y'know, something besides the story summary to draw us in and really make us go "OH DEAR GOD WHY DID YOU LEAVE US HANGING LIKE THIS I AM IN ANGUISH FROM ONLY TWO MINUTES OF NO NEXT CHAPTER PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THAT IS HOLY AND VIBRATORY CONTINUE THE FUCKING STORY". ...That kind of hook. It's an interesting self-insert, sure, but I'm just following along right now because I was in the mood for a Pokegirl story. Do you even have a plot in mind?