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As always I loved this chapter. Yes, I will agree; Raoul & Guy truly have issues (I think we should get Raoul some Prozac & Guy some Ex, maybe some drugs can fic their sex life issues LMAO *laughing evilly*). Better yet how about the sexually repressed Raoul be topped (I bet that would be quite interesting *blushing profusely*). Ooo Ooo I know how about 69'n them I bet that would be an experience since Guy is up for teaching him new things. (^o^)

Back to Iason & Riki; are they going to have some searingly painful sex (you know giving that they were both damn near burned to a crisp). I know I have a bit of an S&M side, but so do my favorite lovers, it would be so fitting for them to pair as Riki is trying to so soothe the Blondie's ailments (however reluctant he pretends to be I should say). We all know that Iason is dying to sample that lithe body and Riki has am EXTREMELY sexually charged body and he hasn't gotten any in this story (I'm kinda feelin' sorry for him ).

Are you going to reveal the plans of the Blondie with dreads and who sent him out to hurt Iason? By any chance was Jupiter behind that day in Ceres? Will Katze be meeting with Raoul and pick up on his lust for Guy? And will Katze be the one to find Iason & Riki, knowing his dealing in the black market *finding them by accident would be so awesome*.

I am totally loving the "Princess" name calling of the most powerful Blondie around. It absolute karma because he has yet to mongrel down . I am ssssssssssssooooooooooooooooooo looking forward to the next chapter Ethereal (Biting my pretty nails to nothingness and pacing the floors trying to wait patiently for the next chapter).

Until next time {*.*}

Poor Guy. But I do agree that Jupiter has a reason why she made the elite in general forbidden to copulate. Loss of control is one theme I could think of, but in my little rp with my friend, we also think that in the manufacturing process she used on the elite, part of their soul was separated and usually they will find their other soul, and she is afraid of them finding that, because most of the time it is with a mongrel, and the intimate act is enough to make them rethink the order and propaganda that she knows. That is just an additional idea. I look forward to the next chapter, sorry to hear about your tooth. But at least this time you were nice and didn't leave me a cliffie. :)

Another very nice chapter, though once more you ended it in a cliffie, but you apologized for it, so it's forgivable. Good luck on your studies and looking forward. Just curious as to how Iason is going to fight with Riki hindering him. Evil, I must say.

OMG!!!!!!!!!

Raoul & Guy, totally delicious visual *Nose bleeding so much that I have to invest in Scott tissue*.
Raoul a VIRGIN (no way he's always nearly RAPING Iason), what a total turn of events. Now all we need is for Guy to penetrate him, to take his virginity completely, then I can die in peace. I can't wait to see what will happen "in the morning"! {*v*}

Iason & Riki, back together sooner than I though *big sighs of relief and grinning from ear to ear*.
But for them to be chained together in a fight is also quit a turn in events. Now Iason will get to see what the sexy "Riki the Dark" can do. Knowing how you like to throw in some great switches, I bet Riki will end up save Iason in this fight. We both know that in truth Riki is as possessive of the Blondie as HE is Riki. Oh Lord this next chapter is going to be great.

BTW
Will there be celebratory sex between Riki and Iason? Is Iason also a virgin? And will Riki get to mount the great Blond (now brunette) Stallion first ?
I look forward to the answers in the coming chapters.

Thanks for another awesome chapter, til next time.

Thanks for the new chapter! I've been meaning to say something for some time, but it has been postponed since I never remember how to log in on my account...

Anyway, I started reading this fic and although it has many mistakes (which you already are aware of), it still managed to capture my interest. The spelling mistakes are quite a shame, because they sometimes make parts of this story rather comical - without it being the intention. At the same time, it puzzles me a bit. How can spelling present such a problem to you when overall your writing is good?

Well, I didn't intent to nag about spelling or grammar or any technical aspects, my point was to tell that you do seem to have a gift for story-telling. So thank you for this fic, I hope you have time and will to continue it.

(And in this chapter - at least I hope I'm reviewing ch 8... - Raoul and Guy were so sweet :)

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am loving the Raoul/Guy pairing opportunity. Although it would have been great if they continued, but the heated flirting is getting so good. Iason & Riki.....separated.....pain in my chest.....heart-ache.....tears running down my face!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please don't make these two face off in the ring! I can't even bear to imagine it......WWWWWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA............sobs heavily.........soul...leaving...body.....I'm totally deflated now.
LOL
I loved the chapter and the story itself. {*.*}

Another good chapter, though I must complain that it was a little shorter than your other ones. And yes, you are evil leaving the cliffies... I give you the poke of doom. So, we're going to see one of my favorite pairings now? Yea! Anyways, continue working hard on your studies. Sheleeta

Agh! A cliffie! Evil evil evil. I can imagine how Iason looks, you did a good job on the description. Good luck in your studies and I look forward to the next installment. Until then. Take care.

Nice nice, at least Raoul finally has Guy's name but we'll see how long he'll use it. I didn't find as many spelling errors in this chapter as the previous ones, so it seems you are getting better with that. :) As always, I look forward to the next chapter. Sheleeta

This made me smile. I like Raoul more and more. I bet Guy doesn't know what exactly is ahead, but I guess he will finally decide to play along a little and find out more info from the Blondie. While this is exactly what Raoul seeks to achieve from the mongrel, this can really turn into a complicated game. But I loved the part with the pillow. I can just imagine Raoul's expression, absolutely priceless! And, clearly, sensuality is there, but humor, too. "color coordinated with the room" ... if that was the only thing. I already suspect Raoul is keeping Guy in as some sort of a pet, as straightlaced as he is, he must have found a formal way to keep a mongrel in his quarters without any headache. And what was with those papers?

Yes, yes, pretty Iason is getting pretty jealous over a mongrel he pretends to not care about. Also, things tend to get a little on the dangerous side with both of them. Riki is hot headed, and Iason is kind of, too, so I guess they're quite a match.

Keep it going, I cannot wait to read what's next.