rate_review Reviews

"she reached the peddles of her womanly flower"
Should be,
"she reached the petals of her womanly flower"

You're right. It was a little short, and moved a little quickly for my tastes. But for a first lemon, I was very impressed. Where did all this experience Shinji seems (claims?) to have come from? Did Asuka get tired of his shit, have her way with him, and then teach him to man up? Or is this explanation to come in later chapters? It is nice to see Shinji with at least half a set of balls. I'm looking forward to more, you have a great start.

Joe

I'm already liking the concept, and insist we get more from you, though I'm hoping to see a lot of Asuka with Shinji, though that's just my own bias.

very good and for ur first go at writing a lemon scene very good