schedule
August 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good, but you SERIOUSLY need to add paragraph breaks.
schedule
August 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I was going to read this. But when I opened the story, I saw it was an absolute data dump. So that stopped me from reading.
Now what I mean by data dump is you didn't bother to sort the story into paragraphs. Without paragraphs it is near impossible to read anything, because it's just word next to word next to word. I would suggest reposting this story with paragraphs. Good luck.
Now what I mean by data dump is you didn't bother to sort the story into paragraphs. Without paragraphs it is near impossible to read anything, because it's just word next to word next to word. I would suggest reposting this story with paragraphs. Good luck.