rate_review Reviews

Hey Asshole Get off yo ass and write teh story, It's been a fucking year

Love your story man and your writing style....but could you bold or " " the telepathic speech...it gets confusing to differtiate between thoughts and telepathy...im loving the plot....waiting for the next chapter..best of luck...

I must say that I believe this story has potential. You seem to work hard to build dialogue and character development and it's an interesting idea to explore a relationship from the beginning like you are. I look forward to seeing the next chapter. If I may ask a question, could you clarify what you meant by the darker sort of stuff you mentioned in the first chapter? I'm not sure if you meant like more romance/real life style or the more nasty, gritty style.

I look forward to watching this story evolve. Anxiously awaiting the next chapter.