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as far as the story goes it was pretty good story, fun, and sexy! Your writing on the other hand needs a lot of work. a lot of your sentences would work better if you made better choices with word order. You also at a lot of unnecessary words to your sentences which make them clunky.

Try to come up with your own writing style; a true writing style is where you use grammar punctuation and the different definitions that words can have to create a clever flow in the store your writing. As of now your writing lacs any of this. Keen at it and I am sure you will improve.