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May 31, 2022 at 12:00 AM
Awesome first chapter 10/10 perfect fanfic score :)
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July 11, 2017 at 12:00 AM
Just read the 1st story about Revy, and I'm already a fan. Well done.
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April 23, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Where's the Roberta part?
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December 9, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Well it looks nice so far. Not sure how do you plan to continue the story. Would be nice if plot get more deeper with more twists. Maybe add more more story with rock trying to find things out with what happened in the first chapter.
The beast part.... Hmm... Nah... Its fine as it is for now and and yeah I agree it might turn some viewers.
I would like said tryed to add more in story element's while you continue to write it.
Best wishes and good writing from ZeoUnit
The beast part.... Hmm... Nah... Its fine as it is for now and and yeah I agree it might turn some viewers.
I would like said tryed to add more in story element's while you continue to write it.
Best wishes and good writing from ZeoUnit
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June 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Enjoyed chap 4. Good, detailed descriptions. They took the right precautions for handling Balalaika. She is actually named for a musical instrument if you can believe it. Beastiality sounds fine. Maybe some Russian wolf-hounds for Balalaika and a pony for Eda (since she's an American `Cow-girl'). Looking forward to Yuna and friends.
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June 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Yes! Exactly what I was hoping for with a Balalaika installment.
And I would drown my own unborn children for a Beast Lagoon series.
And I would drown my own unborn children for a Beast Lagoon series.
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May 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I want to reaffirm that I love this series and am eagerly looking forward to the Balalaika chapter. :)
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December 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'll admit, I'm not fond of the circumstances for Eda here - you've got her taking more-than-reasonable precautions to avoid trouble and make sure the deal goes smoothly, and yet she's outplayed and victimized anyway. It's one thing for Eda to lose because she's careless, overconfident, sloppy, or otherwise as a product of her character failings - quite another for her to be in a "can't win" situation because the men she's dealing with might as well be psychic.
One of the things that makes the ladies of Black Lagoon so appealing for this style of fic is that they're generally tough, smart, and confident - and while Revy in Chapter 1 and Sawyer/Shenhua in Chapter 2 were overpowered in ways that are credible for their characters and their personal flaws, the same isn't true in Chapter 3 in which you essentially set Eda up to fail. I think that's something to be careful about when you're working on Chapter 4 - Balalaika, more than anyone else in the series, is a scary woman and probably the least likely person in Roanapur to expose herself carelessly or foolishly to danger, to say nothing of the rest of her crew. So in some ways, as a writer you're going to have to provide a stronger explanation of how her victimization comes about in order for that victimization to seem credible and for her ordeal to be enjoyable to the reader. The chase makes the capture sweeter, as it were.
One of the things that makes the ladies of Black Lagoon so appealing for this style of fic is that they're generally tough, smart, and confident - and while Revy in Chapter 1 and Sawyer/Shenhua in Chapter 2 were overpowered in ways that are credible for their characters and their personal flaws, the same isn't true in Chapter 3 in which you essentially set Eda up to fail. I think that's something to be careful about when you're working on Chapter 4 - Balalaika, more than anyone else in the series, is a scary woman and probably the least likely person in Roanapur to expose herself carelessly or foolishly to danger, to say nothing of the rest of her crew. So in some ways, as a writer you're going to have to provide a stronger explanation of how her victimization comes about in order for that victimization to seem credible and for her ordeal to be enjoyable to the reader. The chase makes the capture sweeter, as it were.
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December 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chap 3 is hot indeed, well written. Looking forward to Balalaika. Maybe with a big dog?
Eager for more of Yuna's story also. Looking forward to Paine.
SailorNemesis
Eager for more of Yuna's story also. Looking forward to Paine.
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December 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chap 3 is hot indeed, well written. Looking forward to Balalaika. Maybe with a big dog?
Eager for more of Yuna's story also. Looking forward to Paine.
SailorNemesis
Eager for more of Yuna's story also. Looking forward to Paine.
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