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not a bad fluff/lemon/steampuck storiy. but what about the more techy pokimon, like polygon or its evolution?

Not a horrible idea, but your overall grasp of English is. I wouldn't mind being a beta based on two things. One I have 21 credits at the university right now and work weekends so it may take some time at times to edit it. Second, please use spell checker. That would eliminate a number of the mistakes there. Also when doing lemons they should all be taken seriously. I'm not saying sex is serious, but to treat it jokingly puts off the reader.

As for how many girls Ash should have...
I think 3 or 6, because those seem like important numbers in the Pokemon world.

Your concept is interesting but your grasp of the English language is a crime against nature, you desperately need a beta reader. Aslo: if you're going to have sex between characters, at least make them 16 instead of 13 so it isn't pedophilia.

I like it. Maybe you can explore more into Misty's life. What happened to her parents, and why her sister are so mean to her? It will be interesting to see how Ash handles all the girls that join him. Hopefully they are just as loving to each other as they are to Ash.