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January 4, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I liked the story but something prevented me from really liking it. I found the way Shinji talks to asuka in this to be a good and original. But not so hot to me, I think I prefer my Futa on male to be more cliche, boy is suprised by dick on girl, girl fucks boy with dick. I did like it though, thanks for posting it.
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December 27, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Well, that was really hot, but I think you need a pre-reader. There were a lot of spelling and grammer mistakes that needed to be corrected. Other than that, looking forward to more.
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December 23, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I don't have any idea what you're going to do next if you're going to do anything more at all but I really liked this and can't wait to see more. It was a surprising and welcome scene to see a subby futa Asuka and a dominant Shinji who likes taking it in the ass. the biggest problem is that there are obvious grammar errors that could have been cought earleir but I'm not one to talk.
I won't tell you how to take this story in the future. I trust your judgement. I just can't wait to see an update (and maybe a little of Misconception too ;) ).
I won't tell you how to take this story in the future. I trust your judgement. I just can't wait to see an update (and maybe a little of Misconception too ;) ).
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December 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
To be honest I am not sure of what thinking of this story. It is waffy... or disturbing? Or both?
Setting aside that Shinji is totally out of character (and honestly I think that Asuka is more liable to try to trick him into having sex than the other way around... We are talking about Asuka "I want to kiss you but I can not say it aloud because I am afraid of being rejected so I am going to claim that I am bored in order to keep my pride intact in case that you are not interested" Langley Sohryu. The same person who used the Walls of Jericho analogy. I remember reading a fic on Lemontastica called Pride by Loki Nishizaki where she did that), I can not figure him out. On one hand he seemed really caring for Asuka. On the other hand, he seems more interested in humilliating her and mocking her than in winning her over.
You know, I would like that the next chapter goes like this: Shortly after the last scene Shinji goes to the bed... and wakes up at midnight, gagged and chained to his bed by -naked- Asuka, who declares that he did not pleasure her pussy, hence he broke his promise, and she will make him fulfilling it now. He sweats because he had not anticipated that.
As a result of it, both start their little war to decide who is the dom and who is the sub, and in the course of it, they finally come to term with their feelings.
I think that it would be a good story.
Setting aside that Shinji is totally out of character (and honestly I think that Asuka is more liable to try to trick him into having sex than the other way around... We are talking about Asuka "I want to kiss you but I can not say it aloud because I am afraid of being rejected so I am going to claim that I am bored in order to keep my pride intact in case that you are not interested" Langley Sohryu. The same person who used the Walls of Jericho analogy. I remember reading a fic on Lemontastica called Pride by Loki Nishizaki where she did that), I can not figure him out. On one hand he seemed really caring for Asuka. On the other hand, he seems more interested in humilliating her and mocking her than in winning her over.
You know, I would like that the next chapter goes like this: Shortly after the last scene Shinji goes to the bed... and wakes up at midnight, gagged and chained to his bed by -naked- Asuka, who declares that he did not pleasure her pussy, hence he broke his promise, and she will make him fulfilling it now. He sweats because he had not anticipated that.
As a result of it, both start their little war to decide who is the dom and who is the sub, and in the course of it, they finally come to term with their feelings.
I think that it would be a good story.