Somebody Save Me!

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Intro:

They met for the first time tonight. It was a meeting he would never forget. In the midst of all the panic she was a wave of calm. It all started with a phone call to 911. And the officer who was the first to arrive.

Chapter 1

She spent the night out with friends, relaxing and enjoying summer vacation. A few drinks later and she was on her way home. Only she wasn’t alone.

Mina walked into her house, locked the door and turning on the lights, walked down the hallway to the kitchen. A late night snack sounded delicious right about now. With her heels clicking on the floor, she started humming as she scrounged around the fridge for something yummy and sinful.
“ Where’s the junk food when I need it?”

Clang.

What the heck was that? Is there someone in the house with me? Mina stepped away from the fridge and looked around.

Creak.

The hallway! Someone was walking down the hallway to the kitchen. Mina quickly looked around and spying the phone on the counter grabbed it and took off running into the living room. Click click click. Her heels. Quickly she stepped out of her shoes and continued running toward the slider. On the way she dialed 911, as it rang she reached the slider and flipped the lock and tried pulling it open. It didn’t budge. Panic turned to fear before she remembered the wood bar on the floor as a second safety feature. Removing it she heard the operator on the phone

“Hello? Is anybody there? 911, what’s your emergency?”

“Oh God! I’m at 1636 Washington, there’s someone in my house! Help me please!” she whispered into the phone. Sparing a glance behind her, Mina saw a man step around the corner into the loving room and deciding to try and injure him she threw the phone in her hand as hard as she could aiming for his head. It glanced off his brow and he swore but she didn’t stick around and yanking the slider open she ran as fast as she could onto the deck. The deck didn‘t include a set of stairs to get down, it was all railing and a 12 foot drop. Mina ran to the railing hauling her legs over the side she lowered her body so that she was hanging over the side trying to get as close to the ground as possible. Saying a quick prayer she let go of the rail and would have dropped to the ground except for the plant hanger that snagged onto her black halter dress. It stopped her momentum and caused her to swing forward before ripping and dropping Mina to the ground in an almost horizontal position. Her scream as she fell and landed echoed into the woods surrounding her secluded house. The crack of her wrist as it connected with the ground echoed into her head and caused her to cry out in pain yet again. But looking up she saw her burglar starring at her over the edge and she rolled to her feet ignoring every pain and she pushed herself to take off running. If she could just get to the front of the house and down the driveway the closest neighbor was just down the street. Holding her wrist close to her body she ran to the side of the house by her garden and she paused to listen for any sounds. Only her harsh breathing could be heard. She looked down for any weapons but there was nothing except her flower garden. Out of the corner of her eye she spotted one of those decorative garden stones with the cheesy sayings “ Welcome to my Garden”. Good enough she picked up the rock with her left hand and cradling the right to her body she inched her way to the front of the house. She paused one last time before turning the corner.

Wham! There he was! The two bumped into each other , she screamed as he reached up and grabbed her arms to pull her to him. Panic kicked in and she quickly reacted swinging out with her rock hand and clubbing him on the side of the head. He yelled out and quickly let go of her to grab at his head and fall to the ground. Mina didn’t wait to see if he was okay and she just took off running down the drive way skidding over rocks and twigs. The pain went unnoticed as she reached the street. The flashing of police lights at the very end of the street got her attention and yelling for help she took off running towards salvation.

Malachite was almost home when the call came in over the police radio.

“Attention all cars we have a call of a burglary in progress at 1636 Washington. Possible hostage.” the rest of the message faded out as Mal’s mind went into over drive. Washington? That was just 3 streets over. Speeding past his own driveway he whipped his car around the corner and flipped on the siren. When he turned onto Washington he killed the siren but left the lights on. As he glanced at the side of the road to look at the numbers he almost missed the object right in front of his car. Crap! He slammed on his breaks and his car slid to a halt with a jarring screech. The woman standing in the middle of the road holding her arm to her body was a terrifying foot away from his front bumper. Holding his breath he sent a quick prayer up to whoever was on his side tonight. Expelling the air he quickly got out of the car and hurried toward the figure standing frozen in the road.

“Are you okay ma’am? Ma’am?” he asked gently grabbing onto her arms and turning her to face him. “Are you hurt? Do you need an ambulance?”

Shocked blue eyes stared into his smokey gray eyes before realization dawned into her features.
“Please help me. There was someone in my house and he chased me outside, I fell off the deck, my wrist. Then he was there outside (sniffle) and I hit him and ran. And I..I..I’m so scared, I think he knew me!” she finished off in a whisper.

“Come lets get you in the car, my name is Malachite head detective for the SBPD.”
Oh God she was stunning. Her long blond hair was the color of lemons and she was tall. Taller than any woman he’d ever been with before. She reached his chin and she had a slender build to her. Wow, he thought, she’s perfect. He gently took her good hand and led her to the passenger side and got her settled in the car before reaching for his police radio
“This is Mal, yeah I’m at the burglary site. I’ve got her in my car she says he chased her outside. I’m gonna stay with her, send a couple cars out to patrol the area. We don’t need an ambulance I’ll drop her off at the hospital myself.”

A few minutes later another police cruiser pulled up next to them and 2 officers got out. They huddled together and Malachite quickly told them everything he knew.

“We’re glad your okay, did you recognize the man inside your house? Did anything about him look or seem familiar?” The first officer asked.

“No, and I don’t know why he was in my house either. I don’t have anything of value and I don’t have any enemies. Why would someone want to hurt me?”

Malachite gently laid his hand on her shoulder and squeezed “These guys are going to take a look around the property and inside. I can take you to the hospital now to get you looked at. Are you okay with that?”

“Yes please. Can I get anything from the house?”

“Not right now, everything inside is evidence. We’ll let you know when you can come back in. For now it’s the hospital for you.”

Mina looked towards her house and sighed. Malachite starred at her. She looked worn out. Her long locks were tangled around her face and dangled down her back. There was dirt on her face and her little black dress was torn in the skirt so that a good portion of her thigh was showing. Her feet were dainty and you couldn’t tell where her red toe nail polish ended and the bloody scratches on her feet started. The worst though was her wrist, which was already starting to bruise, looked bent oddly and out of shape. She must be in so much pain and she barely uttered a word about it yet. Mina then took that moment to look at him and he couldn’t think for second, her eyes completely surrounded him. The only thing to break his concentration was a slight coughing from the officer next to him.

“We’ll radio this in and see you at the hospital later Mal.” The got back in the car and drove up her driveway. Malachite turned to Mina and guided her to the car. Once she was all settled, he flipped the sirens and off they went.

“ I’m glad you were there for me. You’ll find the guy right?”

“I’ll do everything I can. I won’t leave your side if you want.”

“That would be nice.”

They were silent the rest of the way. Mina was lost in thought about what had just occurred, but mostly she was thinking about the man besides her. He was commanding and yet there seemed to be a softer side to him. Hadn’t he just offered to stay by her side? What sort of stranger would offer that unless he was compassionate. Sneaking a quick glance at him she looked at him, his strong jaw, his long silver hair. He was drop dead beautiful for a man. As if sensing her he turned his head and returned her stare before giving his attention back to the road. In no time they were at the hospital, a staff waiting there to take her in. Before she could stop it Mina was wheeled away into an exam room where she was undressed and put into one of those unflattering robes and laid down. An IV was inserted and a team of professionals bandaged her feet up, cleaned up her scrapes and she was taken down for an x-ray of her wrist. The pain meds she was then given kicked in and she drifted off to sleep.

He was there in her dream. The unknown man who wanted to hurt her. His dark shadow chased her down a never ending hallway. Every door was locked. There was no escape. Tears fell and sobs escaped but still Mina ran. Fearfully she grabbed the knob on a door and tried desperately to turn it but it slipped out of her sweaty palms. Screaming in frustration she finally gave up. She turned to face her attacker. He stepped out of the shadow and finally she saw his face.
“You!”

“Yes my darling. It is me. I’ve been watching you for a long time. Waiting for you to join me. Love me the way I’ve always loved you. Now we can be together. Forever”

Lifting the knife in his hand he plunged it into her heart. She fell and he caught her. Laying her down on the floor he kissed her dead lips and raising the still bloody knife plunged it into his own chest. Now they were together.