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March 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I just wanted to give you a heads-up that your last chapter posted as a wall of words. You might want to consult the following topic on our forum for ways to fix this: http://www2.adultfanfiction.net/forum/index.php/topic/19921-problems-with-the-rich-text-editor/
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March 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Part of this was done in a way that it seems you're writing a play by scene script for a play or show. I don't think you needed to press enter so much between sentences. Having paragraphs is actually rather nice really because in my eyes it seems to give a fluid motion to what you're reading. This is more like a telegram.
Ball was thrown. Stop
Pokemon was captured. Stop
You honestly don't need to use the enter so much. You also should try to go for more words, give a good seven to eight paragraphs if you can, anything above four. The reason why I think so many paragraphs matter is because it gives readers something to read and enjoy, plus it gives you a lot of room to write and draw in the reader, making them want to come back.
Ball was thrown. Stop
Pokemon was captured. Stop
You honestly don't need to use the enter so much. You also should try to go for more words, give a good seven to eight paragraphs if you can, anything above four. The reason why I think so many paragraphs matter is because it gives readers something to read and enjoy, plus it gives you a lot of room to write and draw in the reader, making them want to come back.