Sailor Moon\'s Tentacle Friend

Sweetdeily 2008-08-23 id # 3000057022
You disturbed me on so many levels with this pwp I don't know where to begin.
1. use a spell checker.
2. if the cum was burning hot she would have burns on her face and throat and vagina.
3. when used in a story and referencing two objects the word two should be used, not the number, it looks BAD and breaks your story's flow.
4. pregnancy takes more than one night to show. Go read a book about it, google it or something if you don't believe me.

Ok, so i got this review, and felt i had to respond to this.

1: i have one, i'm sorry, its crap... it's not my fault. i also write late, so my spelling isn't great.
2: it wasn't hot enough to burn her, you can have something that feels burning hot, but won't actually burn you.
3:i know, refer to #1
4:normally, amongst Humans, yes. but this isn't a human, its an alien type thing, so who knows how it works?

Ok, now that i've got that cleared up, Onto Chap. 2! XD

I stared at the mirror with a complete shock overtaking my mind. How was I pregnant with that thing’s child? But all of a sudden I felt a murderous wrenching in my belly and water poured out of my vagina onto the bathroom floor. I gasped, pain wrenching me to the floor.
I felt a heave and something pushed through my vagina. I screamed a quiet desperate scream and this… thing squirmed out of me. I sat on the floor, pain and blood gone, and watching this thing that had used me as an incubator. It grew quickly, when it had been out an hour it was twice the size. It was this odd little green mess of tentacles with one that seemed to be its head with a mouth and eyes on it right in the middle. It writhed around on the floor growing rapidly.
I felt nothing but confusion and horror towards this thing. I was no mother, but a vessel. Somehow I understood that. It wriggled around on the floor and its beady eyes turned to stare at me for the first time, and then it scurried out the open door and through the window into the dawning morning.

*Ami*

I shocked out of my dream as something opened my window. When I went to lean out to see what it was there was nothing there. I slowed my rapid heart and shut the window, turning back to the bed. I lay down and something crept onto my back. I tried to get up but couldn’t move.
It gripped my wrists and reached around, this thing couldn’t be human, it had at least five arms. Maybe more I couldn’t see anything but my pillow as it pressed my head down. It touched the side of my face. I shuddered, it was round and slimy, and it crept around and prodded my mouth.
I clamped tight and it rested there next to my mouth, waiting patiently as I felt my nightgown rip down the back. I shuddered, this couldn’t be happening… I had to be dreaming. I wasn’t wearing a bra so it suctioned to my nipples and grabbed my breasts, tightening its grip around the base.
I moaned and it rammed against my lips, my mouth flying open to admit my most unwanted guest. It thrust itself all the way to the back of my throat, and I tried to scream, but nothing came from my mouth but the thing in another thrust.
I screamed as it slid into my vagina, continuing up until it literally could fit no further. I felt like I was nearly about to explode, my throat and vagina raped to a horrifying extent, then as I groaned in horror it rushed my ass with a force that pushed me off the bed. Screams tried once more to escape my throat, and still they were stuck.
As I felt it tighten up I hoped to god this wasn’t what I thought it was. It thrust faster and faster, I couldn’t breathe. When I knew it couldn’t possibly go any faster it stopped deep in me as it could get, and ejaculated deep into all of my holes. One more scream tried to pass and I passed out.
When I woke up I was on my back and I could no longer see my toes due to the huge belly before me.
Shit.